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Dear [Agent’s Name], A time traveler, a pretty boy, a mind reader, and a speedster, have one goal: break into their university’s high-security lab to uncover the truth behind the Activation. The Activation – a supernatural gift from an alien civilization – allows one percent of the human population ...
- June 15th, 2021, 8:24 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Fantasy: The Son of Ashes
- Replies: 1
- Views: 965
Hello, I like that you are starting with your protagonist, but I think your query would benefit from more specificity. For example, I am confused by the second line of your query. At first, you say Leon is a shut-in, which makes me think it's his choice to isolate himself, but then in the next line ...
Hello, The biggest thing that jumps out to me is your query doesn't feel specific enough. I feel like I am getting the gist of high fantasy, and not your particular story/sense of stakes. Here is what I mean: Now, in those nations, the hero's apprentice, Theo, struggles to fill his mentor's shoes. W...
- February 20th, 2021, 8:45 am
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner/Group: Fantasy
- Replies: 3
- Views: 562
Hello, I'm pretty much in the same boat. I finished my first draft and could use another pair of eyes. My story is YA low fantasy/some sci-fi elements, 88K. It is multiple-POV. If you like my excerpt enough, post some of yours, and we can exchange! This character is gender-neutral, just FYI: “It is ...