Hyaline,
Thanks so much for your input. I think you're close to getting the ideas I was trying to convey. I'll take your advice and try to rework this query again.
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- June 14th, 2011, 11:50 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Falling
- Replies: 12
- Views: 5191
- June 1st, 2011, 11:44 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Falling
- Replies: 12
- Views: 5191
Re: Query - The Falling
JMB, No poster is ever going to make everyone else happy on here, so I can't take every bit of advice thrown my way. I wouldn't say I ignored Quill's suggestions (that's hard to do when he analyzes every word--I'm not complaining, that's just his style), I just took the advice that suited my story b...
- June 1st, 2011, 2:04 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Falling
- Replies: 12
- Views: 5191
Re: Query - The Falling
After a few more changes: Dear [Agent name], I am submitting my work to [Literary agency name] in the hopes that you will represent my contemporary work of fiction, "THE FALLING." Tommy Mueller’s life is perfect. He is a successful Manhattan novelist with a great apartment, an amazing gir...
- June 1st, 2011, 12:07 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Falling
- Replies: 12
- Views: 5191
Re: Query - The Falling
GG, Thanks for input! Is it stubborn or stupid of me to not want to adhere to the structure of a template? My story is a case of dealing with three characters: Kate + Jesse who are learning how to get back up again, and Tommy who is about to fall for the first time in his life. Personally, I wouldn'...
- May 31st, 2011, 7:48 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Falling
- Replies: 12
- Views: 5191
Query - The Falling
This the query for my recently completed manuscript, a work of contemporary fiction. Please let me know what you guys think. Thanks! Dear (insert agent name here), I would be very interested in having (insert literary agency name here) represent my contemporary work of fiction, "THE FALLING.&q...
- May 19th, 2011, 4:29 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Finished Manuscript - Contemporary Fiction
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1520
Finished Manuscript - Contemporary Fiction
I have just finished the first 90,000w draft for my novel, The Falling. The Falling is a story about three 30-something friends in New York who are all experiencing the ups and downs of life, and are each dealing with the mistakes they've made along the way. Kate is an editor/failing writer whose ma...
Re: Canucks
Another Vancouver writer here! Like Mark, I also feel the Canadian market can be a bit narrow. It seems as though we need to include some sort of "Canadian content" just to have a publisher/agent look at it. I made the main character in my first novel French Canadian, just so that I could ...
- June 22nd, 2010, 3:53 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: "TOM'S" - Chapter One
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3791
Re: "TOM'S" - Chapter One
After a bit of editing: (Please keep in mind I'm still looking for a critique partner...if this story is something that strikes you, please contact me. Thanks!) CHAPTER ONE Tommy took a bite out of the big apple. Of course the metaphor was ridiculously obvious, but that had always been his way. The ...
- June 15th, 2010, 11:29 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: WIP...Contemporary Fiction
- Replies: 1
- Views: 2112
WIP...Contemporary Fiction
Hey all, My WIP is my second novel, and I'm looking for some feedback on what I've written so far, and for what's to come. I'd say it's still in its early stages (60+ pages so far), but I'm really just feeling like a second set of eyes would be a big help. This is a contemporary tale about 30-someth...
- June 15th, 2010, 11:21 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 213
- Views: 183528
Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Dear Nathan Bransford, ISABELLE DONHELLE is a professor of ornithology at the prestigious Hawthorne University in Boston. On her twenty-ninth birthday, Isabelle has finally come to the conclusion that her life so far has lacked any kind of significant, meaningful change. But following a chance encou...
- June 13th, 2010, 6:11 pm
- Forum: Town Hall
- Topic: The Introduction Thread
- Replies: 647
- Views: 403826
Re: The Introduction Thread
Hi everyone, My name is Ryan and I live in Vancouver, Canada. Writing is a hobby of mine, but one I take very seriously. I self-published my first novel ("MOLT") last year, and am currently working on a second, non-related novel. Personally, I'm not a fan of all the series and trilogies th...
- June 13th, 2010, 1:55 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: The Incredible Race
- Replies: 50
- Views: 22403
Re: The Incredible Race
rmorris, negative disclaimer? I'm not sure what you mean? I'm sorry. All I meant was that you were all to happy to post your work up for us to read, but the disclaimer was that you felt it had run its course and were ready to give up on it. That doesn't make me jump and down to read it! But I did o...
- June 12th, 2010, 7:48 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: The Incredible Race
- Replies: 50
- Views: 22403
Re: The Incredible Race
A little confidence in your writing is a good thing. Sure, not everyone is going to get their work published, but if you're trying to get people to read it but including a negative disclaimer, it's not going to get anyone too excited about it. I haven't searched the forums to see if you've posted a ...
- June 12th, 2010, 5:34 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: All good - thanks
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2606
Re: Need help with opening scene - adult fantasy
Not that Star Trek is a bad thing, but do you really want to be saying "lived long and prosperous lives" in only your second sentence? It kind of distracted me a little, since Star Trek was the first thing that made me think of. Since the sentence flows right into "profiting off the f...
- June 12th, 2010, 5:20 pm
- Forum: Self-Publishing
- Topic: Oprah?
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1775
Re: Oprah?
But there must still be some submissions sent in, aren't there? There must still be a process if you wanted to try.