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by rmorris
June 14th, 2011, 11:50 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - The Falling
Replies: 12
Views: 2130

Re: Query - The Falling

Hyaline,
Thanks so much for your input. I think you're close to getting the ideas I was trying to convey. I'll take your advice and try to rework this query again.
by rmorris
June 1st, 2011, 11:44 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - The Falling
Replies: 12
Views: 2130

Re: Query - The Falling

JMB, No poster is ever going to make everyone else happy on here, so I can't take every bit of advice thrown my way. I wouldn't say I ignored Quill's suggestions (that's hard to do when he analyzes every word--I'm not complaining, that's just his style), I just took the advice that suited my story b...
by rmorris
June 1st, 2011, 2:04 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - The Falling
Replies: 12
Views: 2130

Re: Query - The Falling

After a few more changes: Dear [Agent name], I am submitting my work to [Literary agency name] in the hopes that you will represent my contemporary work of fiction, "THE FALLING." Tommy Mueller’s life is perfect. He is a successful Manhattan novelist with a great apartment, an amazing girlfriend an...
by rmorris
June 1st, 2011, 12:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - The Falling
Replies: 12
Views: 2130

Re: Query - The Falling

GG, Thanks for input! Is it stubborn or stupid of me to not want to adhere to the structure of a template? My story is a case of dealing with three characters: Kate + Jesse who are learning how to get back up again, and Tommy who is about to fall for the first time in his life. Personally, I wouldn'...
by rmorris
May 31st, 2011, 7:48 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - The Falling
Replies: 12
Views: 2130

Query - The Falling

This the query for my recently completed manuscript, a work of contemporary fiction. Please let me know what you guys think. Thanks! Dear (insert agent name here), I would be very interested in having (insert literary agency name here) represent my contemporary work of fiction, "THE FALLING." “Ever...
by rmorris
May 19th, 2011, 4:29 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Finished Manuscript - Contemporary Fiction
Replies: 0
Views: 915

Finished Manuscript - Contemporary Fiction

I have just finished the first 90,000w draft for my novel, The Falling. The Falling is a story about three 30-something friends in New York who are all experiencing the ups and downs of life, and are each dealing with the mistakes they've made along the way. Kate is an editor/failing writer whose ma...
by rmorris
July 23rd, 2010, 2:45 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Canucks
Replies: 16
Views: 2501

Re: Canucks

Another Vancouver writer here! Like Mark, I also feel the Canadian market can be a bit narrow. It seems as though we need to include some sort of "Canadian content" just to have a publisher/agent look at it. I made the main character in my first novel French Canadian, just so that I could have "Cana...
by rmorris
June 22nd, 2010, 3:53 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: "TOM'S" - Chapter One
Replies: 8
Views: 1610

Re: "TOM'S" - Chapter One

After a bit of editing: (Please keep in mind I'm still looking for a critique partner...if this story is something that strikes you, please contact me. Thanks!) CHAPTER ONE Tommy took a bite out of the big apple. Of course the metaphor was ridiculously obvious, but that had always been his way. The ...
by rmorris
June 15th, 2010, 11:29 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: WIP...Contemporary Fiction
Replies: 1
Views: 1087

WIP...Contemporary Fiction

Hey all, My WIP is my second novel, and I'm looking for some feedback on what I've written so far, and for what's to come. I'd say it's still in its early stages (60+ pages so far), but I'm really just feeling like a second set of eyes would be a big help. This is a contemporary tale about 30-someth...
by rmorris
June 15th, 2010, 11:21 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 213
Views: 119624

Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Dear Nathan Bransford, ISABELLE DONHELLE is a professor of ornithology at the prestigious Hawthorne University in Boston. On her twenty-ninth birthday, Isabelle has finally come to the conclusion that her life so far has lacked any kind of significant, meaningful change. But following a chance encou...
by rmorris
June 13th, 2010, 6:11 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 612
Views: 189591

Re: The Introduction Thread

Hi everyone, My name is Ryan and I live in Vancouver, Canada. Writing is a hobby of mine, but one I take very seriously. I self-published my first novel ("MOLT") last year, and am currently working on a second, non-related novel. Personally, I'm not a fan of all the series and trilogies that keep po...
by rmorris
June 13th, 2010, 1:55 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Incredible Race
Replies: 50
Views: 9601

Re: The Incredible Race

rmorris, negative disclaimer? I'm not sure what you mean? I'm sorry. All I meant was that you were all to happy to post your work up for us to read, but the disclaimer was that you felt it had run its course and were ready to give up on it. That doesn't make me jump and down to read it! But I did o...
by rmorris
June 12th, 2010, 7:48 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Incredible Race
Replies: 50
Views: 9601

Re: The Incredible Race

A little confidence in your writing is a good thing. Sure, not everyone is going to get their work published, but if you're trying to get people to read it but including a negative disclaimer, it's not going to get anyone too excited about it. I haven't searched the forums to see if you've posted a ...
by rmorris
June 12th, 2010, 5:34 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: All good - thanks
Replies: 6
Views: 1138

Re: Need help with opening scene - adult fantasy

Not that Star Trek is a bad thing, but do you really want to be saying "lived long and prosperous lives" in only your second sentence? It kind of distracted me a little, since Star Trek was the first thing that made me think of. Since the sentence flows right into "profiting off the fame of killing ...
by rmorris
June 12th, 2010, 5:20 pm
Forum: Self-Publishing
Topic: Oprah?
Replies: 3
Views: 858

Re: Oprah?

But there must still be some submissions sent in, aren't there? There must still be a process if you wanted to try.