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by emishne
August 6th, 2022, 10:44 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: NEW - Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 152
Views: 125724

Re: NEW - Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Dear [agent], [personalization paragraph] Twelve-year-old Gal has never believed in incantations, Dybbuks, or any amulet her father, a famous exorcist, keeps in his office. That is until she takes a trip with her school to the Western Wall. This is finally her chance to wish her perfect and nasty tw...
by emishne
January 22nd, 2021, 8:05 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: NEW - Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 208
Views: 179569

Re: NEW - Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Shanaz could expose the pharmacist’s biggest fear in less than a minute. No one would notice, of course. Men, women, and children crowded the bazaar, purchasing steaming pita bread from shouting vendors and frowning at overpriced dates. Wedged between an airboat equipment store and a winery, the hea...