Search found 8 matches

by Pewe
January 24th, 2021, 6:50 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Sensory Garden - Women's Fiction
Replies: 13
Views: 5348

Re: The Sensory Garden - Women's Fiction

I am doing a writing course at the moment and it’s suggested that the author has to decide what the split between inner struggle and external implementation, so it could be 50/50 or 70/30 etc. It seems to me that apart from a coping mechanism the garden is a dramatic summary for all that has gone so...
by Pewe
January 23rd, 2021, 1:32 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Creative Writing Techniques & Tips
Replies: 1
Views: 4065

Re: Creative Writing Techniques & Tips

Hi is there any chance you could assess a 2,600 word short story. I’ve tried to write a story within a story.

A lot of what you say rings bells. I’m on a 6 week writing course and we’ve just reviewed a short story that breaks the above rules. Technically wonderful, but not gripping.
by Pewe
January 23rd, 2021, 1:17 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: Edited: Tears of Blood
Replies: 1
Views: 623

Re: Edited: Tears of Blood

It seems the intro. Is a foil for you to describe home. I am not sure what the motivation is here. Sorry I’m not from US/Canada so cannot comment on attraction of family dynamics. However it’s a big wodge of description without motivation. What’s it telling me? The dysfunctional approach to family l...
by Pewe
January 21st, 2021, 4:09 am
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: Hey
Replies: 1
Views: 373

Re: Hey

So what you got

Patrick
by Pewe
January 19th, 2021, 4:19 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Sensory Garden - Women's Fiction
Replies: 13
Views: 5348

Re: The Sensory Garden - Women's Fiction

From what you have written the sensory garden isa coping mechanism to support Helen in the transactional stuff going on around her. So she and her husband move house etc. where is the vision thing to carry her/them on. Can the solace of the sensory garden be shared with Tony or is it exclusive. If e...
by Pewe
January 19th, 2021, 5:29 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Can someone feedback on this
Replies: 2
Views: 701

Can someone feedback on this

Trish returned home from walking charlie on the flood plane. The sun had set on a wonderful summers day and twilight was fast approaching, shadows from lamposts loitered on street corners. As she walked up her road window panes of houses that a few hours ago reflected the sunlight were now dulled an...
by Pewe
January 19th, 2021, 5:22 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
Replies: 6
Views: 993

Re: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)

The opening sentence requires an object for me to aid curiosity. Why has Nero entered the hall then you can link that to the boy. Putting a pentagram in the way of the 2 characters seems problematic and unnecessary.