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by Goelzj
January 6th, 2021, 5:36 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Page critique 1/14/21
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Re: Page critique 1/7/20

“Move out of my way, darling,” Tari commanded with a confident smile. This has taught me that when I start a work with dialogue, the context needs to be clear, such as a guard telling the MC to halt. That doesn't apply here. And the next sentence doesn't help because the speaker is simply standing, ...