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by DrifterNZ
January 23rd, 2021, 6:19 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Can someone feedback on this
Replies: 2
Views: 849

Re: Can someone feedback on this

Hi, The first question that comes to mind reading this is who is Charilie? He is mentioned a little later in the sentence, "Stepping in the backdoor ushered in with charlie a feeling of safety as she felt more exposed on the floodplane." , which in itself sounds a bit strange to me. I but assume Cha...
by DrifterNZ
January 23rd, 2021, 5:52 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
Replies: 6
Views: 1508

Re: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)

Thank you for your feedback and taking the time to read it. I am not sure what you mean by the opening sentence requireing an object, but you have given me something to think about.
Thanks.
by DrifterNZ
November 18th, 2020, 3:54 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Inside
Replies: 1
Views: 731

Re: Inside The Eyes of Providence Chapter One (not sure of correct genre listing for this) Critiques welcome

Okay I admit this isn't really my cup of tea, but I tried to read it.
However I got lost with the sudden change from the sniper rifle firing to fishing. I could not make the connection between the two events. It is like reading one book and suddenly switching to another without any reason to.
by DrifterNZ
November 18th, 2020, 3:31 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
Replies: 6
Views: 1508

Re: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)

Thank you for taking the time to read it and I am glad you enjoyed it . Your feedback is much appreciated and it has dissipated quite a few self doubts.
by DrifterNZ
November 7th, 2020, 5:45 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Thoughts on a male protagonist written by female
Replies: 7
Views: 8664

Re: Thoughts on a male protagonist written by female

I agree with the others. It doesn't matter what sex the person writing the character is, so long as they understand the character. If you are writing a character of your opposite sex, you need to ignore most of the generalizations about that sex as they will lead you astray and your character will e...
by DrifterNZ
November 7th, 2020, 5:20 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
Replies: 6
Views: 1508

The start of The Guilds End (936 words)

Hi, As a first time writer, I have alot of doubts in my work. Could you please look over the begining of my fantasy novel, The Guilds End, and give me some feedback on what I have written and how to improve it.? Many thanks in advance. Chapter 1 Neros entered the large hall. On the floor, two large ...
by DrifterNZ
November 7th, 2020, 5:01 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: What made you start writing?
Replies: 3
Views: 3392

Re: What made you start writing?

For me it was that nearly every fantasy book I read had a hero born in some little out of the way village who grew up to defeat the evil overlord. I always wondered how the overlord got to that position of power and if the overlord was born evil, or did turn evil becuse of circiumstances during his ...