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Okay.. Overall I like it and would keep reading...It seems a little dark and depressing for the start of a book but I guess it is hard to make death sound happy. I have only got a problem with a couple of lines.. The prom dress—silk, torn, and caked in mud—clung to her torso. and, A deputy waded in ...

Sorry for the late reply.. Thanks for the suggestions. The boys background is drip fed throughout the first few chapters of the book. As for the world building, I have deliberately tried to avoid adding too much detail in the world and have left alot to the readers imagination. I have read many book...

What a great start.
You introduced the charaters and setting well and I couldn't help but get drawn into the story.. Great work.
Keep it up.

Definitely a Pantser. My story just sort of evolved. Sometimes the plot twisted in ways that even surprised me.

Sounds like my kind of story. I will be happy to give it a go and will pm you my email address.

This was off to a flying start. Witty and intersting. However by the time I got to the paragraph, "I was the youngest in the family (it would seem that the emergence of Timothy Dalton in 1987 was not enough of an incentive for my parents to indulge in any further procreation) and, mild eccentri...

Hi, The first question that comes to mind reading this is who is Charilie? He is mentioned a little later in the sentence, "Stepping in the backdoor ushered in with charlie a feeling of safety as she felt more exposed on the floodplane." , which in itself sounds a bit strange to me. I but ...

Thank you for your feedback and taking the time to read it. I am not sure what you mean by the opening sentence requireing an object, but you have given me something to think about.
Thanks.

Okay I admit this isn't really my cup of tea, but I tried to read it.
However I got lost with the sudden change from the sniper rifle firing to fishing. I could not make the connection between the two events. It is like reading one book and suddenly switching to another without any reason to.

Thank you for taking the time to read it and I am glad you enjoyed it . Your feedback is much appreciated and it has dissipated quite a few self doubts.

I agree with the others. It doesn't matter what sex the person writing the character is, so long as they understand the character. If you are writing a character of your opposite sex, you need to ignore most of the generalizations about that sex as they will lead you astray and your character will e...

Hi, As a first time writer, I have alot of doubts in my work. Could you please look over the begining of my fantasy novel, The Guilds End, and give me some feedback on what I have written and how to improve it.? Many thanks in advance. Chapter 1 Neros entered the large hall. On the floor, two large ...

For me it was that nearly every fantasy book I read had a hero born in some little out of the way village who grew up to defeat the evil overlord. I always wondered how the overlord got to that position of power and if the overlord was born evil, or did turn evil becuse of circiumstances during his ...