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- January 23rd, 2021, 6:19 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Can someone feedback on this
- Replies: 2
- Views: 697
Re: Can someone feedback on this
Hi, The first question that comes to mind reading this is who is Charilie? He is mentioned a little later in the sentence, "Stepping in the backdoor ushered in with charlie a feeling of safety as she felt more exposed on the floodplane." , which in itself sounds a bit strange to me. I but assume Cha...
- January 23rd, 2021, 5:52 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 901
Re: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
Thank you for your feedback and taking the time to read it. I am not sure what you mean by the opening sentence requireing an object, but you have given me something to think about.
Thanks.
Thanks.
Re: Inside The Eyes of Providence Chapter One (not sure of correct genre listing for this) Critiques welcome
Okay I admit this isn't really my cup of tea, but I tried to read it.
However I got lost with the sudden change from the sniper rifle firing to fishing. I could not make the connection between the two events. It is like reading one book and suddenly switching to another without any reason to.
However I got lost with the sudden change from the sniper rifle firing to fishing. I could not make the connection between the two events. It is like reading one book and suddenly switching to another without any reason to.
- November 18th, 2020, 3:31 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 901
Re: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
Thank you for taking the time to read it and I am glad you enjoyed it . Your feedback is much appreciated and it has dissipated quite a few self doubts.
- November 7th, 2020, 5:45 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Thoughts on a male protagonist written by female
- Replies: 7
- Views: 8448
Re: Thoughts on a male protagonist written by female
I agree with the others. It doesn't matter what sex the person writing the character is, so long as they understand the character. If you are writing a character of your opposite sex, you need to ignore most of the generalizations about that sex as they will lead you astray and your character will e...
- November 7th, 2020, 5:20 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 901
The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
Hi, As a first time writer, I have alot of doubts in my work. Could you please look over the begining of my fantasy novel, The Guilds End, and give me some feedback on what I have written and how to improve it.? Many thanks in advance. Chapter 1 Neros entered the large hall. On the floor, two large ...
- November 7th, 2020, 5:01 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: What made you start writing?
- Replies: 3
- Views: 3226
Re: What made you start writing?
For me it was that nearly every fantasy book I read had a hero born in some little out of the way village who grew up to defeat the evil overlord. I always wondered how the overlord got to that position of power and if the overlord was born evil, or did turn evil becuse of circiumstances during his ...