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- June 9th, 2010, 10:33 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
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Title: THIRTY DECIBELS Genre: YA, dystopian Word Count: 250 When she’s not squealing in my ear, I love Michele like a sister. “Ooooh, Ava, the cake! What’d you pick out?” So, this is how secret lives start. She cranes around my shoulder to catch a better glimpse through my second-floor window. Her h...
Great discussion so far! I'm revising a YA dystopian manuscript in which my main character stops speaking (for the most part) in a volume-based society. I find that present tense helps compensate for some lack of dialogue by pushing the story along with "real-time" action. Her commentary comes more ...