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- June 22nd, 2010, 1:59 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Flash Fiction: THE STRAIN
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2461
Re: Flash Fiction: THE STRAIN
Thanks for the advice! I'll comment on that later, but for now, here's some clarification: The story never changes character. The guy in the beginning is the same guy in the end. Undead is a term used in zombie and vampire lit. It means something along the lines of "animated dead". Rest as...
- June 21st, 2010, 2:09 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Flash Fiction: THE STRAIN
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2461
Flash Fiction: THE STRAIN
EDIT: Currently rewriting this story...
- June 8th, 2010, 5:51 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: how do you write action?
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3459
Re: how do you write action?
First, I absolutely stay away from the idea that the scene should run like a movie in my head. Tension and conflict don't translate well in purely visual elements, since neither of these is inherent in situation. This is, IMO, the downfall of most action (and sex) scenes. Funny, I do go for the mov...
- June 8th, 2010, 2:02 pm
- Forum: Books
- Topic: Bestsellers that don't live up to the hype
- Replies: 29
- Views: 11466
Re: Bestsellers that don't live up to the hype
Brisingr sucked. Bad.
- June 7th, 2010, 6:46 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Full Micro-Fiction Piece
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2856
Re: Full Micro-Fiction Piece
Thanks Serzen!
Already applied the changes. I'll update the original post with the edits.
Already applied the changes. I'll update the original post with the edits.
- June 7th, 2010, 5:55 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Full Micro-Fiction Piece
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2856
Re: Full Micro-Fiction Piece
Poor Jerry. He really got the bad end of the stick, didn't he? I mean, try to help a multiple personality out and that's the thanks you get? :) Wow. I like the voice. Totally gives me that detached nonchalant feeling associated with a sociopath. You show how much power and voice can be created with...
- June 7th, 2010, 5:35 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: how do you write action?
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3459
Re: how do you write action?
Writing action is actually what I started writing for ten years ago. I'm mostly self educated because NO ONE seems to know how to write actions scenes...and the strange few who do never write anything on the subject. Using the barest of bare language is an absolute must, in my humble opinion. And by...
- June 7th, 2010, 3:58 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Full Micro-Fiction Piece
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2856
Full Micro-Fiction Piece
SOrry guys--I've sent it out to be published (hopefully), so I had to remove it from here. Thanks for the feedback and help, I'll be sure to comment more on other posts and post more of my own stuff here in the near future!
- June 7th, 2010, 3:52 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First Page YA: opinions on voice and technique appreciated
- Replies: 30
- Views: 12223
Re: First Page YA: opinions on voice and technique appreciated
Awesome! One of the better written things I've seen on here. I don't normally read YA (if that's what it is) but this totally has my attention.
- June 7th, 2010, 3:40 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: The Last Highway (working title)-Page 1
- Replies: 17
- Views: 7648
Re: The Last Highway (working title)-Page 1
Cool starting, would love to find out what's next, but oh so wordy! I think the guys here have dissected it well. There are many awkward sentences and words that are screaming to be cut out. Not to mention the passive voice which could be easily changed. Examples, some of them already mentioned: &qu...
- June 4th, 2010, 4:55 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: The rules of "stronger" writing... lol?
- Replies: 52
- Views: 18385
Re: The rules of "stronger" writing... lol?
Steppe. '...if your using this that or the other style crutch to many times in to short a span.' should presumably read '...if you're using this, that, or the other style crutch too many times in too short a span.'? And by 'as' and 'but' fetishes you really mean 'ass' and butt' fetishes? Oh, maybe ...
- June 4th, 2010, 1:50 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: The rules of "stronger" writing... lol?
- Replies: 52
- Views: 18385
Re: The rules of "stronger" writing... lol?
For me, there are two basic "rules" that I use to assess the strength of writing at the sentence level: 1. The sentence or phrase should read smoothly and clearly. When you read the sentence, do you stumble over the syntax or become confused about what the subject is? For example, the rea...
- June 2nd, 2010, 9:26 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: The rules of "stronger" writing... lol?
- Replies: 52
- Views: 18385
Re: The rules of "stronger" writing... lol?
I also align more with the writing-as-craft than writing-as-art camp, which I suspect will be spectacularly unsurprising to quite a few people. I know what you mean. The problem is I've spent so much time thinking about art in it's older use that writing as craft and art mean exactly the same thing...
- June 2nd, 2010, 7:14 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: The rules of "stronger" writing... lol?
- Replies: 52
- Views: 18385
Re: The rules of "stronger" writing... lol?
Yet it DOES work, as BrokenChain pointed out. Yeeeah. Matter of opinion, I guess. I didn't like it even when Herbert did it. I hate to say it, but I associate changing POV's within scenes with poorly written romance. It has to do with disrupting the guided meditative state. You're with the new age ...
- June 2nd, 2010, 11:38 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: The rules of "stronger" writing... lol?
- Replies: 52
- Views: 18385
Re: The rules of "stronger" writing... lol?
Anyone else noticed POV issues after a pass? My critique partner pointed them out to me... there weren't that many, but I was surprised I COMPLETELY missed them! lol I know. It's hard because as the authors we know everything but our pov characters don't! Can you give an example? Myself I'm experim...