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by J. T. SHEA
November 22nd, 2021, 9:53 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: YA Fantasy
Replies: 2
Views: 50

Re: Query: YA Fantasy

Much better! You now gives us more of the atmosphere of your novel, what makes it unique. Some of the magic system, the villain's ambitions, the protagonists' gifts and vulnerabilities. I like to think of agents and other professionals as readers avid to be entertained and surprised rather than ster...
by J. T. SHEA
November 16th, 2021, 12:25 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Query critique 11/18/21
Replies: 2
Views: 67

Re: Query critique 11/18/21

Interesting. But somewhat general. More specific detail would help. Like introducing the Bad Guy(s) or Gals, if there are any. What makes this different from other YA fantasies?
by J. T. SHEA
November 1st, 2021, 5:25 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What's Up with Form Rejection?
Replies: 12
Views: 5154

Re: What's Up with Form Rejection?

An old but evergreen thread. To mix a couple of metaphors, while the devil can indeed be in the details, one can fail to see the wood for the trees, and indeed see only one tree, or just a small part of it. That's where “blurbs” and suchlike come in. What's the overall story? How would I describe it...
by J. T. SHEA
September 29th, 2021, 11:45 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Page critique 9/30/21
Replies: 1
Views: 194

Re: Page critique 9/30/21

My first reaction is that this first page introduces us to several characters, living and dead, by means of several info dumps and “As you know Bobs”. Both are widely considered taboo. My contrarian streak urges me to see the value of such transgressions, and both can indeed save time and space, par...
by J. T. SHEA
September 6th, 2021, 12:59 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Query critique 9/9/21
Replies: 1
Views: 1191

Re: Query critique 9/9/21

An intriguing query! Only one small caveat occurs to me offhand. While I have no problem with high profile comparisons, I would not describe my work as a retelling of someone else's, however loose. Something along the lines of “I believe fans of the Iron Man or Iron Giant will enjoy Cable,” might be...
by J. T. SHEA
August 26th, 2021, 1:46 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Query critique 8/26/21
Replies: 1
Views: 1181

Re: Query critique 8/26/21

Interesting! I just have a few thoughts:- Dear [Agent], I am seeking representation for my paranormal mystery novel, THIEF OF BREAN. The book is complete at 75000 words and is first in a planned duology. A serial murder case with no witness or evidence is Detective Carleton Lavely’s last shot at kee...
by J. T. SHEA
July 27th, 2021, 1:01 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: agent seeks author investment
Replies: 2
Views: 1435

Re: agent seeks author investment

Greetings, kindred spirit indeed! I did a little googling and have a few thoughts. Conrad Press is not an agency, though its principal James Essinger (a prolific author) briefly ran Canterbury Literary Agency, which sold few books, according to him, and is now defunct as far I can tell. As is often ...
by J. T. SHEA
July 24th, 2021, 12:51 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: e.g., CP ask: "Fix My Phrase"...pls pick your favorite version: 1a? 1b? 1c? 1d? 1e? 1f? 1g?..........genres=OpEd,etc
Replies: 0
Views: 1639

Re: e.g., CP ask: "Fix My Phrase"...pls pick your favorite version: 1a? 1b? 1c? 1d? 1e? 1f? 1g?..........genres=OpEd,etc

While interesting, your post seems off-topic both for the Critique Partner section and probably for this writing website in general. I'll leave it here but I suggest you post any follow-ups in the “Procrastination” section or, if you intend to publish it elsewhere and really want feedback, in the “E...
by J. T. SHEA
May 13th, 2021, 12:07 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Where is Administration forums.nathanbransford.com ??
Replies: 1
Views: 1091

Re: Where is Administration forums.nathanbransford.com ??

Nathan is the administrator. I am the moderator. You can PM either of us.
by J. T. SHEA
April 1st, 2021, 3:30 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Where is Administration forums.nathanbransford.com?
Replies: 1
Views: 1014

Re: Where is Administration forums.nathanbransford.com?

I moderate the Forums for Nathan. You can use the Private Messages system (see top right of screen) to contact either of us.
by J. T. SHEA
November 13th, 2020, 1:45 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)
Replies: 6
Views: 2810

Re: The start of The Guilds End (936 words)

I like this. A good start with situation and characters introduced well. I would read on. No improvements or corrections occur to me offhand.
by J. T. SHEA
June 10th, 2020, 8:31 am
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 636
Views: 308322

Re: The Introduction Thread

Yes indeed! Mostly writers posting pages or queries for critiques at the moment. Nathan's blog is well worth checking out too.
by J. T. SHEA
March 5th, 2020, 12:38 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Query critique 3/5/20
Replies: 2
Views: 4772

Re: Query critique 3/5/20

July 11th!? I've lost four months!? Must be time travel...Or too many Monster drinks...
by J. T. SHEA
January 31st, 2020, 6:05 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis Mystery Novel
Replies: 1
Views: 7140

Re: Synopsis Mystery Novel

An interesting mystery thriller with a downbeat ending. Your synopsis is clear and succinct, Just one quibble:- “She is able to log into his laptop after a couple of unsuccessful attempts and discovers a lab document. She realizes who is the killer. She tries to log into his laptop but cannot guess ...
by J. T. SHEA
December 30th, 2019, 6:06 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: DEEP POV
Replies: 1
Views: 3620

Re: DEEP POV

I'm not quite sure about Deep POV being the latest rage. Your piece seems in a fairly normal POV to me. Perhaps I am just so used to Deep POV that I take it for granted. Anyway, I'll just reproduce your piece with a few suggestions:- Gideon awoke to the blare of sirens. A bright light hurt his eyes ...