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by J. T. SHEA
May 12th, 2018, 5:05 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Writing a scene with both the protagonist and antagonist in the same area.
Replies: 4
Views: 74

Re: Writing a scene with both the protagonist and antagonist in the same area.

Yes, but there are several different types of 3rd person POV. Take your first chapter for example. This is told from Rebecca's POV until her death. The POV is less specific after that but appears to be Mrs. Claus' POV since she notices things and gets an idea, both of which are her internal thoughts...
by J. T. SHEA
May 12th, 2018, 6:50 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis for "Walking in a Killer's wonderland"
Replies: 2
Views: 53

Re: Synopsis for "Walking in a Killer's wonderland"

Just a few thoughts occur to me at the moment, Brian. Capitalize the 'W' in 'Wonderland'. “Each crime scene is different from the last and there is always a gift box left for Atoms at almost every crime scene.” I would omit the word 'always' as it conflicts with the phrase 'almost every' and isn't n...
by J. T. SHEA
May 12th, 2018, 6:14 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Need Cirtique on some of my manuscript
Replies: 6
Views: 203

Re: Need Cirtique on some of my manuscript

A good question! Looking back through the 'EXCERPTS' section I could not find a similar example. Back at the start in 2010, Nathan's Guidelines suggested: “Also, if you revise your excerpt, please continue to post it in the original thread you started rather than starting an entirely new thread.” Th...
by J. T. SHEA
May 12th, 2018, 6:11 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Should I post a new thread for each chapter?
Replies: 2
Views: 46

Re: Should I post a new thread for each chapter?

A good question! Looking back through the 'EXCERPTS' section I could not find a similar example. Back at the start in 2010, Nathan's Guidelines suggested: “Also, if you revise your excerpt, please continue to post it in the original thread you started rather than starting an entirely new thread.” Th...
by J. T. SHEA
May 12th, 2018, 5:52 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Writing a scene with both the protagonist and antagonist in the same area.
Replies: 4
Views: 74

Re: Writing a scene with both the protagonist and antagonist in the same area.

Depends on the Point of View, I'd say. Are you telling the scene from the POV of one of the characters or both or a more general God-like POV?
by J. T. SHEA
May 11th, 2018, 4:06 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Need Cirtique on some of my manuscript
Replies: 6
Views: 203

Re: Need Cirtique on some of my manuscript

Interesting, Brian. Just a few thoughts:- I've bolded and italicised words I've added or moved, and struck-through those I think could be omitted. You don't say what it is Rebecca tries to fight out of. The Point of View change is unusual and might irritate some readers, but not me. I don't understa...
by J. T. SHEA
December 31st, 2017, 3:09 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: Happy New Year to all on the Bransforums!
Replies: 0
Views: 599

Happy New Year to all on the Bransforums!

Happy New Year to all on the Bransforums! :)
by J. T. SHEA
November 17th, 2017, 4:15 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: I am a very old dog .....
Replies: 2
Views: 1316

Re: I am a very old dog .....

Nathan is right. Helen Hoover Santmyer's huge novel “...AND THE LADIES OF THE CLUB” was published when she was 87 and sold over 2 million copies in paperback alone. There is no real flavor of the moment, since each moment has many flavors, which will change before any novel begun now is published. B...
by J. T. SHEA
November 4th, 2017, 12:39 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Feedback needed on poem - 'Remember'
Replies: 1
Views: 632

Re: Feedback needed on poem - 'Remember'

Hello and welcome, Marie Beth. I claim no particular expertise regarding poetry, but none is required to enjoy a poem, and I enjoyed yours, its images and rhythm and strong simple message. Modesty is fine, but I wouldn't apologize for your writing.
by J. T. SHEA
October 21st, 2017, 8:41 pm
Forum: Self-Publishing
Topic: ? on literary style
Replies: 1
Views: 624

Re: ? on literary style

I don't know the subject of your workbook, but it sounds like you're addressing your future readers well as it stands. Even if in a technical manual, you can still use a personal style. Changing to the third person would distance you from your reader and sound artificial too.
by J. T. SHEA
October 16th, 2017, 8:39 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: Newcomer greetings to all
Replies: 2
Views: 716

Re: Newcomer greetings to all

Welcome, Joe! These Bransforums, as I call them, and Nathan's blog are mines of information about writing, publishing, and monkeys. Well worth study, though you'll have to go back a few years for the monkeys. :D
by J. T. SHEA
September 20th, 2017, 10:03 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Waiting
Replies: 3
Views: 307

Re: Waiting

DO yell multiple obscenities into the abyss! Then write a scene where your protagonist yells multiple obscenities into the abyss. Then we'll all join you both in yelling multiple obscenities into the abyss. Maybe the abyss will yell back, to paraphrase Nietzsche.
by J. T. SHEA
September 20th, 2017, 9:54 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Thoughts on a male protagonist written by female
Replies: 4
Views: 334

Re: Thoughts on a male protagonist written by female

Agatha Christie is the highest-selling author of all time. Her 80 novels have topped 2 billion sales and are still going strong. I've never heard of anybody criticizing her writing of her most famous protagonist, Hercule Poirot. Likewise J. K. Rowling's Harry Potter. And Rowling more recently manage...
by J. T. SHEA
July 15th, 2017, 12:52 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Monsters - A Survey
Replies: 4
Views: 654

Re: Monsters - A Survey

I agree with Nathan. Minimalist monsters work better in movies and on TV than on the page.
by J. T. SHEA
July 9th, 2017, 11:09 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Query Critique 7/11/17
Replies: 1
Views: 2550

Re: Query Critique 7/11/17

Interesting. A few thoughts occur to me:- I would round up the word count to 84,000 words. Unfortunately, this novel may not really be very 'speculative'. Many drugs and psychiatric procedures like ECT are already implicated in destroying creativity, among other ill effects, particularly on teens. S...