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by Wandaduplooy
February 24th, 2010, 12:27 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: ECHTRA : BLOOD MAGICK - FIRST PAGE
Replies: 10
Views: 2525

Re: ECHTRA : BLOOD MAGICK - FIRST PAGE

Thank you for all the feedback. Knowing the notes will not make you a singer but all singers must know the notes—so I agree that I do need to tighten up my grammer etc. Ryan, my aim is not to write a literary masterpiece. I want people to live inside my novels, to forget about the world and everythi...
by Wandaduplooy
February 23rd, 2010, 6:59 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: ECHTRA : BLOOD MAGICK - FIRST PAGE
Replies: 10
Views: 2525

Re: ECHTRA : BLOOD MAGICK - FIRST PAGE

I am having a "Are you good enough" moment . Please, even if you just write total rubish or good but need work. A Brilliant here and there would also help, but I do want honesty! I know 2 rejections are nothing but I need to know. My beta readers love my novel, but they know me! I want a opinion of ...
by Wandaduplooy
February 23rd, 2010, 6:36 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Echtra : Blood Magick - query letter!
Replies: 8
Views: 1581

Re: Echtra : Blood Magick - query letter!

Thank you for al your feedback! I will take it all into consideration!
by Wandaduplooy
February 20th, 2010, 12:19 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: ECHTRA : BLOOD MAGICK - FIRST PAGE
Replies: 10
Views: 2525

Re: ECHTRA : BLOOD MAGICK - FIRST PAGE

As with my query letter, I believe I have been given as much help as I can hope for... Thank you to all who has given a opinion. I respect all but will only take use what I really believe to be relevant to me! What is the use changing to please others? We must stay true to oneself. If it can be impr...
by Wandaduplooy
February 20th, 2010, 12:15 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Echtra : Blood Magick - query letter!
Replies: 8
Views: 1581

Re: Echtra : Blood Magick - query letter!

I guess this is as much help as I am going to get! Thank you for the suggestions. The reason why I mentioned the subsequent projects is because I want a agent who will stand with me through it all... I want to be in a partnership, a marraige and I prefer one partner—not one for every novel. I want t...
by Wandaduplooy
February 18th, 2010, 10:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Echtra : Blood Magick - query letter!
Replies: 8
Views: 1581

Re: Echtra : Blood Magick - query letter!

Thank you for all your sugesstions. I will read and edit my letter and post it again!!! Passive Phase holds a part in writing or am I wrong? I conveys a different mood than acive phase and plases more emphasis om tha action?
by Wandaduplooy
February 18th, 2010, 10:50 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: ECHTRA : BLOOD MAGICK - FIRST PAGE
Replies: 10
Views: 2525

Re: ECHTRA : BLOOD MAGICK - FIRST PAGE

Thank you for all your feedback. The first sentence is in past tence because I want to try and convey time passing - the slow onset of darkness. It is dark will not convey that the evening is more sinister, more dark and that something bad is about to happen. I also like to write in present tence. I...
by Wandaduplooy
February 18th, 2010, 9:30 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query-- Scatter (Lit. Fic)
Replies: 27
Views: 4826

Re: Query-- Scatter (Lit. Fic)

[Personalized bit]. SCATTER is a 114,000 word work of mainstream literary fiction exploring American notions of fate, individualism and community through a doomed love between two girls in small-town Kentucky. The girls’ basketball state championship is over, trophies awarded, and as people filter o...
by Wandaduplooy
February 18th, 2010, 9:21 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: 100 Wishes - Romance novel Query - Take 1
Replies: 19
Views: 3305

Re: 100 Wishes - Romance novel Query - Take 1

You guys know that I pop ideas like crazy don't you? lol well prob not, but I just finished my first draft of a third novel in ROMANCE! Yikes I never thought I could make it since I am such a Fantasy person! Anyways I am still working on my major FANTASY manuscript and I just had to try this challan...
by Wandaduplooy
February 18th, 2010, 9:09 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: A Measure of Disorder (YA Fantasy) REVISED AGAIN = )
Replies: 19
Views: 3142

Re: QUERY: A Measure of Disorder (MG Fantasy) Vastly REVISED

I love the concept and the "torn apart" part, I would leave out. I have images of plants tearing children to pieces when I read it, but it could be only me. Passive voice- I believe it has a place in writing - it conveys a mood that active voice cannot. I am also struggling with my own query and wou...
by Wandaduplooy
February 18th, 2010, 9:01 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: ECHTRA : BLOOD MAGICK - FIRST PAGE
Replies: 10
Views: 2525

ECHTRA : BLOOD MAGICK - FIRST PAGE

I need feedback - love it or hate it, please feel free to comment. Daylight had long since given up its hold on the small town of Edwardsville, Illinois. With the sun’s departure, darkness crept into the town like black fog, shrouding buildings and trees in a hushed gloom. Bright florescent lights i...
by Wandaduplooy
February 18th, 2010, 8:44 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Echtra : Blood Magick - query letter!
Replies: 8
Views: 1581

Echtra : Blood Magick - query letter!

I had two rejections with this letter – please give constructive criticism Agent X 17 February 2010 Agent X, One night Connor Riley finds himself wide-awake, unable to explain what woke him—and then the headaches start. Over the next few days, he tries to figure out why the waitress who disappeared...
by Wandaduplooy
December 15th, 2009, 11:16 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: a Query Letter—what it means for me...
Replies: 2
Views: 1160

a Query Letter—what it means for me...

A query letter is for me like an appetiser—a small meal designed to awaken the palate and tantalise the senses. It is a teaser, a promise of the meal to come… The query letter is no a plate laden with the fish- and meat courses, topped with a dollop of ice cream and a cherry, because you fear that t...
by Wandaduplooy
December 13th, 2009, 3:08 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revised Query... please help...
Replies: 14
Views: 3525

Query - revised....

Hi everyone This is my revised query - I took all of the suggestions into consideration - tried to keep the best parts and build on the others. The funniest think happened - I posted this earlier and for some strange reason my topic just disappeared... I checked with “View your posts" and nothing. I...
by Wandaduplooy
December 13th, 2009, 9:12 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Favorite writing distractions
Replies: 30
Views: 5974

Re: Favorite writing distractions

Lets see :
the obvious ones - day job and living and then facebook, updating my blog and research. This blog is a big distraction...