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by sperber
August 16th, 2010, 5:13 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 193412

Re: Ask Nathan

I know non-writing credentials don't typically belong in a query. Are there some nuggets of info that are worth mentioning, such as living in the country where the novel is set, or expertise in a subject that's pivotal to the plot? Or does this fall into the category of meh, can't hurt, but doesn't ...
by sperber
June 10th, 2010, 12:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: query #2: The Suburban Spy, edited
Replies: 10
Views: 1685

Re: query #2: The Suburban Spy, edited

Mommalike, Great job polishing your query. Really, the difference between the first draft and this new one is amazing. Only one thing really stuck out, in a bad way: Liz will have to decide—risk her family’s safety and stability, or go back to plain vanilla after just a taste of excitement. I believ...
by sperber
June 7th, 2010, 4:06 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Okay, be honest…how crappy is your first draft?
Replies: 41
Views: 13134

Re: Okay, be honest…how crappy is your first draft?

How crappy?

My husband knows I'm working on edits when he hears me making barfing noises at the computer.

Yeah, that crappy.
by sperber
May 5th, 2010, 12:59 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query for FURY (HELP!!!) (New version)
Replies: 11
Views: 1915

Re: Query for FURY (HELP!!!)

Brandi -- I'll give it a shot. It's strange... I can usually figure out what isn't working in other people's queries, but I flounder when it comes to my own. This query is bleh. I like some of the syntax, but the sentence structure seems too uniform and I'm not sure the plot is coming through, or, i...
by sperber
May 4th, 2010, 1:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Mallory's Story- Rip it apart. :D
Replies: 13
Views: 2191

Re: Query Mallory's Story- Rip it apart. :D

Great start! Here are my thoughts. Good luck. Dear Mr. Awesome Agent, Sometimes the dead haunt the living, and sometimes, the living hurt the dead. For a wandering spirit named Mallory Richards, every day hurts. She can't remember how she died, and the memories of how she lived are fading fast. Star...
by sperber
May 4th, 2010, 11:15 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY HELP PLEASE!!! New Revised Copy at End of Post!
Replies: 16
Views: 2647

Re: QUERY HELP PLEASE!!!

kathleen wrote:And chick lit is dead!?!??! I didn't know that? When did this happen?
I just saw an ad for Sex in the City 2. So long as Carrie and the girls are running around, you're safe. ;)
by sperber
May 4th, 2010, 9:02 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY HELP PLEASE!!! New Revised Copy at End of Post!
Replies: 16
Views: 2647

Re: QUERY HELP PLEASE!!!

Kathleen, Your novel sounds fun, but your query sounds very business-like. I think this is what agents are talking about when they say they're looking for a strong voice in a query letter. (They do say that, right?) Maybe add a few more specifics that show the humor and attitude that I'm sure your n...