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by daringnovelist
August 3rd, 2010, 5:39 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Do we have any screenplay writers in our midst?
Replies: 6
Views: 1244

Re: Do we have any screenplay writers in our midst?

I wrote screenplays for a while. I placed well in some competitions (won some little ones, got the famed "just missed the quarters" in the Nicholl), and I had one produced as a play at the Discovering New Mysteries drama festival. I also did some script analysis work. I find the structure of a scree...
by daringnovelist
August 2nd, 2010, 7:11 pm
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 338922

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

My blog is an ongoing "novel dare" where I post my progress. I often write about issues I'm dealing with or analysis of techniques in works I'm reading. Last night I was dealing with adding dramatic weight to a comic mystery which started out as a short story. http://daringnovelist.blogspot.com/2010...
by daringnovelist
June 24th, 2010, 3:13 pm
Forum: Self-Publishing
Topic: So I want to self publish... kinda sorta, not really
Replies: 17
Views: 3601

Re: So I want to self publish... kinda sorta, not really

If you don't want to really self-publish - just create some copies for friends and review, then mark it "Advanced Review Copy" so it can't be mistaken for a real print run. (Further more, if you publish it later, those could be collector's items.)
by daringnovelist
June 12th, 2010, 4:02 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Which opener grabs you the most? Women's fiction.
Replies: 24
Views: 7174

Re: Which opener grabs you the most? Women's fiction.

I liked the first one best, except for the double shot of heavy foreshadowing in the first paragraph. "...the news story that cracked my soul" and "I would be forever changed" are each a little heavy handed in the first place. The first might be okay, especially given the dramatic style you've got g...
by daringnovelist
May 27th, 2010, 8:32 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Man Who Did Too Much scene 2 - mystery
Replies: 9
Views: 1891

Re: The Man Who Did Too Much scene 2 - mystery

Thanks, Aimee! The first scene is listed as the "opening" - here's a direct link, I htink: http://forums.nathanbransford.com/viewtopic.php?f=15&t=1378 Or the whole first chapter is at: http://www.camillelaguire.com/dare/ManWhoOpening.html Username: Everyone I know uses the word "message" for voice m...
by daringnovelist
May 16th, 2010, 12:38 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Man Who Did Too Much scene 2 - mystery
Replies: 9
Views: 1891

Re: The Man Who Did Too Much scene 2 - mystery

This part takes place in a fictional city something like Traverse City (but less touristy). The bulk of the story takes place to the west in a tiny beach town/county. I do like dialog. (Used to do screenwriting.) But most of this story will actually be told from the view point of a character who has...
by daringnovelist
May 15th, 2010, 6:50 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Man Who Did Too Much scene 2 - mystery
Replies: 9
Views: 1891

Re: The Man Who Did Too Much scene 2 - mystery

Since it worked for you, I was just curious as to whether it was with or without context. Thanks again.
by daringnovelist
May 14th, 2010, 8:42 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Man Who Did Too Much scene 2 - mystery
Replies: 9
Views: 1891

Re: The Man Who Did Too Much scene 2 - mystery

lmitchell wrote:I don't read mystery...ever. Until now. You pulled me right in. Nice. :)
Thank you. Just a question, did you read the first section too or just this one by itself?

Camille
by daringnovelist
May 13th, 2010, 10:43 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words
Replies: 12
Views: 2600

Re: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words

The unclear parts are all clear to me now. (But that could be partly because I have read it before.) The exposition didn't bother me as much this time - perhaps the polishing of other parts helped.

Camille
by daringnovelist
May 12th, 2010, 4:47 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: BROKEN MIRROR, new query, new delivery
Replies: 38
Views: 5536

Re: BROKEN MIRROR, new query, new delivery

... I've been banging my head against the protagonist problem for far too long, I think. It's a daring point of view, and I've been too hesitant about bringing it to the front; ... daringnovelist: The indistinction between literal and metaphorical, real and imagined, is a key facet of the work itse...
by daringnovelist
May 12th, 2010, 3:17 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Man Who Did Too Much scene 2 - mystery
Replies: 9
Views: 1891

The Man Who Did Too Much scene 2 - mystery

Here is the second scene of the mystery. It takes place immediately after the opening scene I posted earlier. George has just stepped out of his girlfriend's shrink's office, having been told that maybe he should be trying to help her get life back to normal. This one is a little less terse (if you ...
by daringnovelist
May 12th, 2010, 3:05 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words
Replies: 12
Views: 2600

Re: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words

I don't read a lot of fantasy, so take my comments with a grain of salt. This is a powerful scene. It's a little overwritten, at least for my tastes, but the only thing I would really want to cut is the amount of exposition. I'm not even sure I got the information I need out of it - he overdosed her...
by daringnovelist
May 12th, 2010, 2:38 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Man Who Did Too Much opening - Mystery
Replies: 6
Views: 1110

Re: The Man Who Did Too Much opening - Mystery

Thanks! I'll be going over that more later. While I was reading your notes I finally thought of the right word to describe his attitude at a few points. It was nagging at me. Whenever George uses her first name it's in reaction to the fact that she just used his (in that mildly controlling way shrin...
by daringnovelist
May 12th, 2010, 12:50 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Man Who Did Too Much opening - Mystery
Replies: 6
Views: 1110

Re: The Man Who Did Too Much opening - Mystery

Thanks Ermo: You actually inadvertently answered one of my main questions - is it clear this is a therapist's office? Some people pick up on the clue, but not everybody, so maybe I need to be more explicit earlier there. (She entered through the waiting room, not the ER.) Dr. Cannon doesn't care abo...
by daringnovelist
May 11th, 2010, 11:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: BROKEN MIRROR, new query, new delivery
Replies: 38
Views: 5536

Re: BROKEN MIRROR, new query, new delivery

This is all really vague. The language and imagery is cool, but I don't even know enough to be able to tell what is metaphor and what is literal.

But the big thing is: Who is the protagonist? What does he or she have to do?