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by NWolfe
May 14th, 2010, 4:29 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, a novel (#4, revised)
Replies: 26
Views: 4792

Re: TRINITY, a novel

When I read this, I had a major 'buzzah?' moment. You really need to establish why the Mayans care about leukemia research, and why they would destroy a lab over it. Rainbow covered everything else.
by NWolfe
May 1st, 2010, 6:03 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Revision: Euphonious Brine
Replies: 36
Views: 5613

Re: Query Revision: Euphonious Brine

Dear Agent, Thirteen year-old Griffin Tutela doesn’t believe. (This sentence confuses me. Doesn't believe what?) His lineage is supposedly from another world and his family has been left on Earth to protect the gateway to the Aureus Wood, a sacred forest behind his Grandmother’s house. But he’s sur...
by NWolfe
May 1st, 2010, 4:54 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Start with THE HOBBIT or FELLOWSHIP OF THE RING?
Replies: 85
Views: 20420

Re: Start with THE HOBBIT or FELLOWSHIP OF THE RING?

Hobbit or Lord of the Rings?

Neither!
by NWolfe
May 1st, 2010, 4:35 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Voice and YA
Replies: 7
Views: 1751

Re: Voice and YA

Voice is simply the color of the prose. A great writer is something akin to a painter, using prose as paint.
by NWolfe
April 28th, 2010, 3:33 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Fantasy Query - THE COURTESAN'S BLADE
Replies: 6
Views: 1212

Re: Fantasy Query - THE COURTESAN'S BLADE

[personalized agent greeting here] (Everything I've read says to start with the story, then do the personalized greeting.) In an attempt to avoid any more scandals in a politically unstable kingdom, the king secretly hires a courtesan to occupy his wild son. Prince Anton, known for his drinking and...
by NWolfe
April 25th, 2010, 2:14 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: dirge of the desert - new attempt, new slant
Replies: 50
Views: 7548

Re: dirge of the desert - new attempt, new slant

Dear Agent: Janelle’s life was almost perfect. Her divorce was nearly finalized. She enjoyed a flourishing career at the premier genetic experimentation facility in the world. Best of all, she was carrying the child of her true love, the geneticist whose work she’d followed since high school. It wa...