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by BethC
October 19th, 2010, 10:58 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, New take
Replies: 7
Views: 1144

Re: I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, New take

Thank you all for your comments and I agree. I have a query I've sent (obviously not this one) to 12 agents and received requests for 3 partials and 2 fulls...so I may stick with that one for the moment. Based on critiques from two Beta readers and a "retired" editor, I've tightened my manuscript an...
by BethC
October 18th, 2010, 10:15 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, New take
Replies: 7
Views: 1144

I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, New take

I know I've been gone for...seems like forever...major revisions and now I'm happy again. Just trying a new query. Please tell what you think. I'll only post the main body of the query...will add info about why I'm querying the certain agent, etc. thanks for your help. Sometimes wishes come true. So...
by BethC
September 16th, 2010, 7:17 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: MG Fantasy: Demas' First Task: The Prophecy of Rob
Replies: 4
Views: 1034

Re: MG Fantasy: Demas' First Task: The Prophecy of Rob

Ellie, I haven't post yet but will do so. It's YA,paranormal romance, I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY. I've been working with a critique partner and am fortunate enough to have made contact with an old friend who recommended I sent it to a friend of hers who is now a stay-at-home mom, but worked as an...
by BethC
September 15th, 2010, 8:56 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: MG Fantasy: Demas' First Task: The Prophecy of Rob
Replies: 4
Views: 1034

Re: MG Fantasy: Demas' First Task: The Prophecy of Rob

oops, sorry the font color didn't change within the quote. Obviously I'm not good at this. hope you can make sense of it.
by BethC
September 15th, 2010, 8:54 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: MG Fantasy: Demas' First Task: The Prophecy of Rob
Replies: 4
Views: 1034

Re: MG Fantasy: Demas' First Task: The Prophecy of Rob

Hi Ellie. I've been away from the forum for a couple of months, trying revisions of my own, but I'm intrigued by your story. I don't know that I'm the best person to help, but I'll offer my comments. Chapter One: Thou Shalt Not Slay Animals Uselessly Be wary, my friends. Not all of the King’s tasks...
by BethC
July 19th, 2010, 5:04 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY
Replies: 8
Views: 2005

Re: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY

Take a look at this and see if the changes help. I don't have it formatted right at the top with name/genre, etc. but will before I send it. Synopsis: I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY Today is Presley O’Connor’s eighteenth birthday. She intends to make it the best one yet. But the letter she pulls from...
by BethC
July 19th, 2010, 4:28 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY
Replies: 8
Views: 2005

Re: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY

Thanks for your comments dios4vida. I do need to clear things up and will do that. Just so you'll know. the person she first suspects (the one with no murderous thoughts) is a classmate that's been harassing her because she won't go out with him. It isn't him. A serial killer is the letter sender an...
by BethC
July 16th, 2010, 1:02 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY
Replies: 8
Views: 2005

Re: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY

Made a few revisions. See if this is clearer. Synopsis: I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY A senior year is meant to be fun and crazy, and today is Presley O’Connor’s eighteenth birthday. She intends to make it the best one yet. But the letter she pulls from the mailbox promises anything but fun. The co...
by BethC
July 15th, 2010, 10:49 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY
Replies: 8
Views: 2005

Re: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY

That's what I was thinking as I reread the synopsis and your comments. I'll work on this and repost with an update. Maybe good fortune will fall on us both.
by BethC
July 15th, 2010, 10:23 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: REVISED Synopsis - Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)
Replies: 22
Views: 4996

Re: REVISED Synopsis - Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)

Quill, I read the same about a long and short. If I live through the short, I'll tackle the longer version. Most agents I have on my list that ask for a synopsis, want a short one so that's where I went first. The information on writing one is so varied. I read Nathan's post on writing a synopsis an...
by BethC
July 15th, 2010, 10:17 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY
Replies: 8
Views: 2005

Re: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY

EvelynEhrlich, this is exactly why I love this forum. I've read and reread so many times that things just make sense...it is so easy to see what others have to say. I have struggled through nine revisions...each one giving Jack less time. While he certainly isn't the MC, he's a character that is thr...
by BethC
July 15th, 2010, 2:49 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: REVISED Synopsis - Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)
Replies: 22
Views: 4996

Re: REVISED Synopsis - Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)

I have been off the board for awhile working on my own synopsis and posted today. I wanted to look at other synopsis' and found yours very interesting. You've had some great comments and I won't repeat anything said. My biggest question comes from the sentence that says everyone assumed she was dead...
by BethC
July 15th, 2010, 2:26 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY
Replies: 8
Views: 2005

NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY

Please check the revision a few posts down. I'm in the query process and have put off the dreaded synopsis as long as I dare. Had one request for partial but eleven days later rejected. Sulked for a couple of hours, ate the biggest brownie I could find, and got back to work. This is about the ninth...
by BethC
June 25th, 2010, 7:12 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Will grovel for feedback. I Would Have Loved You Anyway.
Replies: 26
Views: 4120

Re: Will grovel for feedback. I Would Have Loved You Anyway.

I did a couple of queries today, just to get a feel, and sent one very similar to the last one posted. Jessica, I used the eyes in the query because the dream comes back later in the story and the eyes are always a part of them, plus it's Reid's eyes that always have made Presley weak in the knees. ...
by BethC
June 24th, 2010, 11:25 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Will grovel for feedback. I Would Have Loved You Anyway.
Replies: 26
Views: 4120

Re: Will grovel for feedback. I Would Have Loved You Anyway.

This is getting seriously crazy. I'm posting a query I wrote some time back and decided to bring it back and have another look. just posting the body. tomorrow I'm deciding on one and working from there. too many versions. Love, even when you’re psychic, is complicated. Presley O’Connor’s senior yea...