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by rainbowsheeps
June 17th, 2010, 6:17 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY - crime/police fiction
Replies: 32
Views: 5234

Re: QUERY - crime/police fiction

Thanks, Quill! After reading a few dozen blurbs (online and hardcopy) for crime/detective novels I realized my query was pretty close to those already. I've re-edited my query for this novel as if I was writing the dust-jacket "pitch."  Please feel free to tear apart my ~371 words.  ;o) Dear XXX,  ...
by rainbowsheeps
June 17th, 2010, 2:19 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query - Sept. 23rd
Replies: 21
Views: 3703

Re: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query

Wow, Wilderness, those questions you posed and the link to Nathan's blog really, really helped. I reconstructed the query to add more details. My first one seemed very boring. How does this sound in comparison? It's been a few weeks since I've critiqued anything. Forgive me, I'm a little rusty. Isa...
by rainbowsheeps
June 15th, 2010, 2:55 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Kick-Thyself Moments
Replies: 19
Views: 6932

Re: Kick-Thyself Moments

I sent my first query out... and forgot my contact information.

Luckily, she replied to the email I used to send to her, so it wasn't a big deal. I definitely agonized for a week, though.
by rainbowsheeps
June 15th, 2010, 2:47 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Partial versus Full
Replies: 5
Views: 1156

Re: Partial versus Full

This is me just kind of idly guessing, but... There are agents who request both partials and fulls from people. I'm not sure you should jump to the conclusion the agent is less interested in your work if they simply requested a partial, though. Again, I'm just guessing here, but I think word count o...
by rainbowsheeps
June 3rd, 2010, 5:16 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - YEEOD
Replies: 8
Views: 1773

Re: Query - YEEOD

Thanks so much for all your guys' help! Sorry if I have some grammatical issues, I am getting it..lol. Anyways I have worked out a new revision which I hope is better. Can't wait to see what you think! Dear Agent, In a world where magicians rule, ("in a world" is a movie trailer thing. It's also su...
by rainbowsheeps
June 3rd, 2010, 4:41 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Super Incredible Pre-Agent Tester!
Replies: 29
Views: 5160

Re: The Super Incredible Pre-Agent Tester!

Would I read the sample pages? (1) YES What would I do? (A) Personalized Rejection or Partial Request (depends on pages) The concept is good. Looks like it will use fantasy as a metaphor for the Holocaust, which could be excellent. However, you're missing several commas. One might be forgivable, but...
by rainbowsheeps
May 30th, 2010, 9:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY for historical novel
Replies: 8
Views: 1447

Re: QUERY for historical novel

I am having a forest for the trees problem. Any suggestions would be welcomed. Re: COYOTE WINDS, middle grade historical novel, approximately 45,000 words Dear _________: The coyote. When he's hungry, he hunts. When he’s tired, he sleeps. Sometimes Miles wishes he could be a coyote. A coyote wouldn...
by rainbowsheeps
May 27th, 2010, 2:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Nathan's query "template"
Replies: 20
Views: 2881

Re: Nathan's query "template"

]Neck-deep in query composition (okay, in over my head!), I decided to apply part of Nathan's template http://blog.nathanbransford.com/2008/03/query-letter-mad-lib.html to my crime/detective novel, JOEY'S PLACE. Not sure how it might help others, but I found it useful in making me think "outside" t...
by rainbowsheeps
May 26th, 2010, 1:28 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Music or quiet when you write?
Replies: 64
Views: 16744

Re: Music or quiet when you write?

I usually write with music. There are specific times when I need to concentrate that I turn it off and need absolute silence. Those are usually for focal parts of the story, or scenes heavy with dialog. I make a soundtrack of songs that I correlate with certain scenes from the book beforehand, and u...
by rainbowsheeps
May 26th, 2010, 1:22 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: A Nerd for Words
Replies: 5
Views: 876

A Nerd for Words

A few moments ago, I was looking over my sample pages and discovered a wrong word (possibly) in a sample page I sent out. I said "tight" rather than "tightly." It didn't come up as improper in one word processor, but it did in Word. I looked it up after, and found that "tight" can actually be used a...
by rainbowsheeps
May 24th, 2010, 4:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY - crime/police fiction
Replies: 32
Views: 5234

Re: QUERY - crime/police fiction

One step forward? or back? Latest query version at 361 words.... THANKS for the feedback! Dear , September 1970. What happens in Vegas stays in Vegas because nobody gives a damn. Then a man with two slugs in his head is discovered in his car outside a casino. Bad for business. (Awesome.) The Sherif...
by rainbowsheeps
May 23rd, 2010, 7:57 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: SF Query: THE ARTIFACT COMPETITION
Replies: 45
Views: 7484

Re: SF Query: THE ARTIFACT COMPETITION

Thanks, lunerunit. Here is a version with a few points of clarification and the missing "the". As for why anyone should care about anything, I don't really have an answer for you, except that we do and Jav does. Not trying to be snippy, but not sure how to really address that. But, I have clarified...
by rainbowsheeps
May 23rd, 2010, 12:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: VALENTINE, New Revision & stuff
Replies: 33
Views: 5240

Re: Query: VALENTINE, New Revision & stuff

Just a quick addition to my last comment. I would like more about the visions seeping into reality, either an explanation of the concept or, better yet, an example. Did one of his dream visions occur? I thought about adding an example of this. I might try it out and see how the query flows then. Th...
by rainbowsheeps
May 22nd, 2010, 5:40 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy Query - I wish this will be the last!
Replies: 20
Views: 3148

Re: YA Fantasy Query - I wish this will be the last!

Thanks guys for all your great critique! I took a while off if you have not noticed. OFF WRITING Completley!! Crazy eh? lol. But anyways I think it really refreshed my mind and I am quite happy with my newer version of my query. Tell me if its bad though! I have thick skin! I personally think that ...
by rainbowsheeps
May 22nd, 2010, 3:34 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: SF Query: THE ARTIFACT COMPETITION
Replies: 45
Views: 7484

Re: SF Query: THE ARTIFACT COMPETITION

Any and all feedback, as always, is most welcome and appreciated! Quill and rainbowsheeps, I'm not ignoring your suggestions for the first paragraph, but am really trying to focus on the second one for the time being. (I'll focus on the second paragraph then, as well.) Newest Latest Version Dear Ag...