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by otherside89girl
August 1st, 2011, 12:48 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Pitch help? (YA)
Replies: 4
Views: 824

Re: Pitch help? (YA)

Wow, thanks so much, polymath! Very helpful indeed. I am actually almost halfway through the first draft. I'm preparing the pitch for an upcoming writers' conference. (Although I won't be officially pitching, of course, since my novel isn't nearly finished.) I never thought of writing a pitch to pre...
by otherside89girl
July 31st, 2011, 8:17 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Pitch help? (YA)
Replies: 4
Views: 824

Pitch help? (YA)

*edit*

Thanks so much for the help :)

(I deleted my pitch out of sheer embarrassment, but I will take the advice to heart!)
by otherside89girl
November 3rd, 2010, 8:25 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Can You Have Alternating Third Person/First Person?
Replies: 24
Views: 3635

Re: Can You Have Alternating Third Person/First Person?

Yes you can. MY NAME IS MEMORY by Ann Brashares is a good example of this. It's actually pretty tricky... there are two protagonists, and it switches from third person between each of them, and then sometimes goes into first person (when one of them is sharing his memories). And like you said, the s...
by otherside89girl
October 4th, 2010, 1:37 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Is my query query-ish enough?
Replies: 13
Views: 1805

Re: Is my query query-ish enough?

Quill: I saw the humor, nothing malicious. :) android: Thanks for your comments. I thought the second query was less synopsis-like than the first one I posted, and I already sent it off to an agent I like, so we'll see... :/ But I do see your point. OH and one of the guys turns out to be kind of a j...
by otherside89girl
October 3rd, 2010, 7:11 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Is my query query-ish enough?
Replies: 13
Views: 1805

Re: Is my query query-ish enough?

Thanks, everyone, you guys are super helpful. Here is a new version -- I tried to do the hook, synopsis, details kind of format. A suicidal almost-boyfriend and a potential true love who risked illegal immigration to see her again. That’s what Ronnie Gold, senior, has. If only Ronnie Gold, freshman...
by otherside89girl
September 28th, 2010, 2:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Is my query query-ish enough?
Replies: 13
Views: 1805

Re: Is my query query-ish enough?

Thanks, Mark and Hillary! (Hillary, you made me crack up with the bitter divorcee comment... I definitely didn't think of it that way until you pointed it out! Thanks! haha) I made a few changes to the query up there. I am wondering, though... I have heard to put the title and word count at the end,...
by otherside89girl
September 27th, 2010, 11:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Is my query query-ish enough?
Replies: 13
Views: 1805

Is my query query-ish enough?

Hi everyone. A lot of you have given me some great feedback on my past queries for RONNIE FOR REAL. I'm looking for help again because I think my queries have been too similar to my synopsis. Thank you! *Edit* Newest version is down there in post 6! RONNIE FOR REAL is an 85,000 word young adult nov...
by otherside89girl
September 8th, 2010, 3:04 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Resubmitting etiquette
Replies: 5
Views: 936

Re: Resubmitting etiquette

Thanks, Holly. Excellent suggestions. I took your advice. :)
by otherside89girl
September 8th, 2010, 2:07 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 213
Views: 116599

Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Dear Mr. Bransford, RONNIE FOR REAL is a 90,000 word young adult novel told in two parts: Freshman Year and Senior Year. Freshman Ronnie Gold wants high school to change her. She wants to grow up, to learn about photography and French, to talk to boys without melting in embarrassment. If someone had...
by otherside89girl
September 8th, 2010, 2:01 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Rejection Stats
Replies: 227
Views: 94035

Re: Rejection Stats

Genre: Contemporary YA
Queries sent: 17
Rejections: 11
Pending: 6
Partial requests: 0
Full requests: 1.... rejected



Just got a rejection on my first full. Ouch. :/ Sigh. Try, try again.
by otherside89girl
September 8th, 2010, 2:01 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Resubmitting etiquette
Replies: 5
Views: 936

Resubmitting etiquette

If an agent gave feedback on a full, offering suggestions to improve the MS... but didn't invite me to resubmit... could I still resubmit after I've made the changes? Or is that a huge no-no? And another thing, am I supposed to send a reply thanking her for her helpful feedback? Or not? Because I do...
by otherside89girl
August 30th, 2010, 5:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: query Forever Young (v. 4.0)
Replies: 6
Views: 980

Re: query Forever Young (v. 3.0)

I completely agree with thewhipslip.

You need to add a lot more detail to grab the agent and make them care. Your story does sound good, but it didn't paint a clear enough picture for me -- probably because you were trying not to give too much away. You should add the details thewhipslip suggested.
by otherside89girl
August 30th, 2010, 5:00 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: 7 Rejections - Time for a Revision - round 3 Anyone??
Replies: 12
Views: 1947

Re: 7 Rejections - Time for a Revision

OK, I have commented on a few queries so I think it only fair that I put mine out there to go under the knife. I'm hoping that it's my query that needs help and not my story. Here goes: Dear Agent, When Jane Picardy, a talented concert pianist, finds an old conductor’s baton, she does what any self...
by otherside89girl
August 24th, 2010, 10:57 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: December--Your Help Needed!
Replies: 9
Views: 1193

Re: Query: December--Revision--Your Help (still) Needed!

Thanks so much for your help! It looks like I have a second problem--not wanting to give everything away, but still make the story intriguing. Thanks for helping me see that. Here's round two--hopefully clearer: It’s December 1945, but the first peacetime Christmas after World War II holds few tidi...
by otherside89girl
August 24th, 2010, 3:21 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Teenage Writers?
Replies: 47
Views: 12167

Re: Teenage Writers?

I'm 20 and a college student. I wrote most of my novel last year, my first year of college, and... basically I just didn't have a social life at all. I didn't have a job either. But I also only spent 2-3 hours every other day writing, so I think I could balance that with school and a job next time. ...