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- April 8th, 2010, 10:32 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: MG Novel Query
- Replies: 14
- Views: 4931
Re: MG Novel Query
Twelve-year-old Sarah doesn’t believe in any of that guff about magic or the supernatural. Her life is boring and that's the way she likes it. That's all going to change when her little sister, Jane, disappears before her eyes during a game of hide and seek, and Sarah leaves her old life behind to g...
- April 7th, 2010, 11:08 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - MG - THE WHISPERING FERNS
- Replies: 17
- Views: 6907
Re: Query - MG - THE WHISPERING FERNS
Dear Makemy Dreamscometrue, The most adventurous thing eleven year old James “Smith” Campbell ever did was try and run away to the Smithsonian, and he only got one block away and a nickname out of that. However, W hen (you don't need any of this backstory) James "Smith" Campbell is sent to...
- April 6th, 2010, 12:03 pm
- Forum: Town Hall
- Topic: FORUM NEOPHYTE
- Replies: 14
- Views: 9056
Re: FORUM NEOPHYTE
Awesome guys. Thanks for your help.
- April 6th, 2010, 10:56 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: SftOS - Help Revise Please? First Pages driving me crazy
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3413
Re: SftOS - Help Revise Please? First Pages driving me crazy
Chapter 1 When the police arrived, I told them I’d missed the merge sign. I even complained that there were too many Water Streets in Massachusetts. I couldn’t tell them that a ghost had dived headfirst into my windshield. She was still in my passenger seat. “Your license?” said the officer. I hande...
- April 5th, 2010, 11:04 am
- Forum: Town Hall
- Topic: FORUM NEOPHYTE
- Replies: 14
- Views: 9056
FORUM NEOPHYTE
Hello All- I have been trying to offer helpful suggestions but am having difficulty formatting my responses. I've looked in FAQ, but can't find an answer. Several of you like Quill, Shadow, and kenpochic are good about providing feedback that's formatted in a way that's easy to read. I can't figure ...
- April 1st, 2010, 2:29 pm
- Forum: Self-Publishing
- Topic: Borders survives!!
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2750
Re: Borders survives!!
PTL- My critique group will be so excited when we meet tonight at Borders. Now we don't have to find a new meeting place.
- April 1st, 2010, 11:30 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Gilded Wings
- Replies: 25
- Views: 9336
Re: QUERY: FEATHERS (YA -Fantasy-Romance)
Love the name, but your query needs some help. Here's what I'd suggest. First go back to Nathan's blog, then look under Essentials and find the blog entry called "The Basic Query Letter Formula". Start by doing the "mad lib" thing. Then customize your query from there. I think th...
- March 31st, 2010, 10:13 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Does this opening hook you? *Jelly Beans for replies!
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8373
Re: Does this opening hook you? *Jelly Beans for replies!
I've read this about 20 times now and tried to figure out how to put this. My issue is this name. I just can't get past it. Every time I read this, I ponder over how this is pronounced, what the etimology is, and I can't procede with the story at all. I know that names are so personal and such a pro...
- March 31st, 2010, 9:41 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Help Needed: ZOMBIE RABBIT
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5616
Re: Query Help Needed: ZOMBIE RABBIT
Poisonguy-
This is so great. Thank you so much for the awesome suggestions. Now I just have to get my MS in great shape and I can get back to querying.
This is so great. Thank you so much for the awesome suggestions. Now I just have to get my MS in great shape and I can get back to querying.
- March 31st, 2010, 2:56 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query- Isabella Vampirella (EVIL EDITOR response at end)
- Replies: 36
- Views: 12761
Re: Query- Isabella Vampirella
I'm back to implore you not to change her name, or the spelling of her name. To heck with Twilight. About one out of five girls are named Isabella or some form anyway. I think the name Isabella Vampirella is absolutely adorable. This will sell the book. The only thing I hate is that I didn't think o...
- March 30th, 2010, 11:57 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Help Needed: ZOMBIE RABBIT
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5616
Re: Query Help Needed: ZOMBIE RABBIT *Revision
I tried to take everyone's excellent suggestions and put them into action. I left out everything that would be customized for a particular agent, and also anything that relates specifically to queries for children's agents. Here's the core of my query. Thanks again to everyone for your help. Milo Th...
- March 30th, 2010, 8:07 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Help Needed: ZOMBIE RABBIT
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5616
Re: Query Help Needed: ZOMBIE RABBIT
Thank you everyone for your excellent comments. I've got so much to go over. I'm glad LOST isn't on right now so I can get right to work.
- March 29th, 2010, 11:42 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Help Needed: ZOMBIE RABBIT
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5616
Query Help Needed: ZOMBIE RABBIT
I'm a children's writer trying to perfect my query letter for my Middle Grade novel: ZOMBIE RABBIT. I need a Simon Cowell worthy critique for my query. Thanks in advance for any feedback. Dear Agent: I am searching for an agent to represent my 30,000 word, Middle-Grade novel, ZOMBIE RABBIT. Your web...
- March 27th, 2010, 10:05 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Natural Selection, Part Two: NOW CLOSED
- Replies: 10
- Views: 4334
Re: Query: Natural Selection (Mystery) Part Two
Sorry, I just can't get past this line about being pressured by an evasive cop. What is that supposed to mean? How's the cop supposed to pressure him and evade him at the same time. So I ponder that, give up, and stop right there.
- March 27th, 2010, 2:54 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query- Isabella Vampirella (EVIL EDITOR response at end)
- Replies: 36
- Views: 12761
Re: Query- Isabella Vampirella
I'm a children's writer and I think you have a great hook here. There's not much out there in paranormal for this age range, but kids of all ages are attracted to this stuff. Your query has some really good things such as the explanation of the plot and characters. You have some really akward senten...