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Re: Superhero Housewives. First 350 words.
Nice writing. Good flow and suspense. I'd keep reading.
- August 19th, 2011, 10:00 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Don't Mess With Canada
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2728
Re: Ch. 1, humor story
This is just great. Funny, engaging, great title. Love the way you set it up: dialogue/narrator/dialogue/narrator, etc. Wish I had some words of wisdom for you, but I can't find fault. I'd like to see more. Good luck with it. NickB
- August 19th, 2011, 8:44 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: In the Land of the Super-Geniuses
- Replies: 7
- Views: 5493
Re: In the Land of the Super-Geniuses
Hey John. Can't believe I'm the first to say so: this is hilarious! Lots of laugh-out-loud moments. This is my first time reading in this genre. You'll have to recommend some fave authors.:) Not sure what you want in the way of critique. Do you know where you're going with it or are you totally pant...
- August 9th, 2011, 10:00 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Blurb~Historical Fantasy~151 words
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2327
Re: Blurb~Historical Fantasy~151 words
Sounds like something I'd enjoy. Here are my thoughts on the blurb: First line: a quick descriptor of what she imagined would be good...one adjective or a phrase...like did she expect, restful, peaceful, boring? With which "loved ones" will she be reunited? If we get several lives, will it...
- July 29th, 2011, 10:00 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First attempt at MG
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1614
First attempt at MG
Hi everyone. I haven't been posting (or writing much) lately, but I hope to get back into the swing of things around here. If I left anyone hanging...on feedback, I mean...I apologize. It truly could not be helped. So this is me, trying to get back into the swing of things. Onward and upward. I've s...
- June 29th, 2011, 9:12 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 720
- Views: 451835
Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
THE FAVOR Crime comedy--opening paragraphs Leonard Gustafson was five years old when his mother died. Immediately following the funeral, he strode from her graveside and without a word, climbed into his father’s black German sedan. “Don’t piss Amara off,” his father said to him then. “Remember, you’...
- March 4th, 2011, 9:01 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Big Picture Reader for YA fantasy mystery
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3835
Re: Big Picture Reader for YA fantasy mystery
Hey Sarah, Still interested. And don't worry. The subject matter won't offend me. (Wait, you're not in prison for something particularly heinous, are you? ;) Send it on whenever you're ready. I'll PM you my e-mail address. Nick
- February 25th, 2011, 10:43 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Big Picture Reader for YA fantasy mystery
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3835
Re: Big Picture Reader for YA fantasy mystery
Hi, This books sounds fun. I'd like to try reading for you, though I'm only just reentering the YA/MG reading world. So, I'm unfamiliar with genre norms. However, I figure Good is Good and if a reader is into the idea and voice of your book s/he may be a helpful reader. I've read the Bosch, Secret s...
- January 15th, 2011, 3:51 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First 400 Words, Narrative Non-fiction
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4061
Re: First 400 Words, Narrative Non-fiction
Hi again! I really like this and would continue to read, even though I read little non-fiction (except for mounds of research...and short work.) I agree that your last sentence would be a great place to start...but I like "I'm here to meet the prince." too. My more specific thoughts are be...
- January 13th, 2011, 2:17 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: South Florida crime comedy opening comparison
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2786
Re: South Florida crime comedy opening comparison
elmtree322, Hi! Thanks so much for the comments and encouragement. I've thought the same thing about combining them a bit, but haven't yet come up with anything good. I may run part of the first one later in the book. But then, sometimes what I like has to go away...for rhythm and flow, pacing...yad...
- January 11th, 2011, 7:31 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: South Florida crime comedy opening comparison
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2786
South Florida crime comedy opening comparison
Hi guys. This is a lengthy post in an oddball genre: S. FL crime comedy (ex.: Hiaasen, Dorsey...), but I'm hoping maybe a reader or two of this genre might find this and give it a skim. I write "skim" because I really only want to know if either opening would hook you...or which you prefer...
- December 7th, 2010, 7:41 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Does anyone ever lose that spark?
- Replies: 41
- Views: 17316
Re: Does anyone ever lose that spark?
"...I got to wonderin' if sometimes we spend too much time chasing the story rather than setting the mental environment so the story wants to come back to us - so to speak." Watcher55 would make a great marriage counselor. :) I'm thinking now that good relationship-building/keeping How-To ...
- December 7th, 2010, 7:23 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Am I going crazy? Didn't I change that?
- Replies: 11
- Views: 3814
Re: Am I going crazy? Didn't I change that?
I like the labyrinth theory...though I have caught myself saving to the Wrong Version. One time, I found what I had done: The MS was changed to the New Way in an older version. Otherwise, for me I think it's a combo of everything mentioned. But I think I don't do the weird memory stuff as much when ...
- December 7th, 2010, 7:07 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Does anyone ever lose that spark?
- Replies: 41
- Views: 17316
Re: Does anyone ever lose that spark?
I want that rock.
Great topic and posts. Thanks.
Great topic and posts. Thanks.
- September 21st, 2010, 7:47 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: Favorite activity to avoid writing
- Replies: 28
- Views: 13093
Re: Favorite activity to avoid writing
daydreaming sordid affairs...c'mon, be honest here people! LOL Dear hubby, Kidding. Nick