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by NickB
August 24th, 2011, 10:54 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Deleted
Replies: 6
Views: 1848

Re: Superhero Housewives. First 350 words.

Nice writing. Good flow and suspense. I'd keep reading.
by NickB
August 19th, 2011, 10:00 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Don't Mess With Canada
Replies: 2
Views: 1444

Re: Ch. 1, humor story

This is just great. Funny, engaging, great title. Love the way you set it up: dialogue/narrator/dialogue/narrator, etc. Wish I had some words of wisdom for you, but I can't find fault. I'd like to see more. Good luck with it. NickB
by NickB
August 19th, 2011, 8:44 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: In the Land of the Super-Geniuses
Replies: 7
Views: 3213

Re: In the Land of the Super-Geniuses

Hey John. Can't believe I'm the first to say so: this is hilarious! Lots of laugh-out-loud moments. This is my first time reading in this genre. You'll have to recommend some fave authors.:) Not sure what you want in the way of critique. Do you know where you're going with it or are you totally pant...
by NickB
August 9th, 2011, 10:00 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Blurb~Historical Fantasy~151 words
Replies: 2
Views: 1192

Re: Blurb~Historical Fantasy~151 words

Sounds like something I'd enjoy. Here are my thoughts on the blurb: First line: a quick descriptor of what she imagined would be good...one adjective or a phrase...like did she expect, restful, peaceful, boring? With which "loved ones" will she be reunited? If we get several lives, will it just be t...
by NickB
July 29th, 2011, 10:00 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First attempt at MG
Replies: 0
Views: 823

First attempt at MG

Hi everyone. I haven't been posting (or writing much) lately, but I hope to get back into the swing of things around here. If I left anyone hanging...on feedback, I mean...I apologize. It truly could not be helped. So this is me, trying to get back into the swing of things. Onward and upward. I've s...
by NickB
June 29th, 2011, 9:12 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 282973

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

THE FAVOR Crime comedy--opening paragraphs Leonard Gustafson was five years old when his mother died. Immediately following the funeral, he strode from her graveside and without a word, climbed into his father’s black German sedan. “Don’t piss Amara off,” his father said to him then. “Remember, you’...
by NickB
March 4th, 2011, 9:01 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Big Picture Reader for YA fantasy mystery
Replies: 6
Views: 2151

Re: Big Picture Reader for YA fantasy mystery

Hey Sarah, Still interested. And don't worry. The subject matter won't offend me. (Wait, you're not in prison for something particularly heinous, are you? ;) Send it on whenever you're ready. I'll PM you my e-mail address. Nick
by NickB
February 25th, 2011, 10:43 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Big Picture Reader for YA fantasy mystery
Replies: 6
Views: 2151

Re: Big Picture Reader for YA fantasy mystery

Hi, This books sounds fun. I'd like to try reading for you, though I'm only just reentering the YA/MG reading world. So, I'm unfamiliar with genre norms. However, I figure Good is Good and if a reader is into the idea and voice of your book s/he may be a helpful reader. I've read the Bosch, Secret s...
by NickB
January 15th, 2011, 3:51 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 400 Words, Narrative Non-fiction
Replies: 6
Views: 2100

Re: First 400 Words, Narrative Non-fiction

Hi again! I really like this and would continue to read, even though I read little non-fiction (except for mounds of research...and short work.) I agree that your last sentence would be a great place to start...but I like "I'm here to meet the prince." too. My more specific thoughts are below the li...
by NickB
January 13th, 2011, 2:17 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: South Florida crime comedy opening comparison
Replies: 3
Views: 1383

Re: South Florida crime comedy opening comparison

elmtree322, Hi! Thanks so much for the comments and encouragement. I've thought the same thing about combining them a bit, but haven't yet come up with anything good. I may run part of the first one later in the book. But then, sometimes what I like has to go away...for rhythm and flow, pacing...yad...
by NickB
January 11th, 2011, 7:31 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: South Florida crime comedy opening comparison
Replies: 3
Views: 1383

South Florida crime comedy opening comparison

Hi guys. This is a lengthy post in an oddball genre: S. FL crime comedy (ex.: Hiaasen, Dorsey...), but I'm hoping maybe a reader or two of this genre might find this and give it a skim. I write "skim" because I really only want to know if either opening would hook you...or which you prefer. If it's ...
by NickB
December 7th, 2010, 7:41 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Does anyone ever lose that spark?
Replies: 41
Views: 9294

Re: Does anyone ever lose that spark?

"...I got to wonderin' if sometimes we spend too much time chasing the story rather than setting the mental environment so the story wants to come back to us - so to speak." Watcher55 would make a great marriage counselor. :) I'm thinking now that good relationship-building/keeping How-To might bene...
by NickB
December 7th, 2010, 7:23 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Am I going crazy? Didn't I change that?
Replies: 11
Views: 1654

Re: Am I going crazy? Didn't I change that?

I like the labyrinth theory...though I have caught myself saving to the Wrong Version. One time, I found what I had done: The MS was changed to the New Way in an older version. Otherwise, for me I think it's a combo of everything mentioned. But I think I don't do the weird memory stuff as much when ...
by NickB
December 7th, 2010, 7:07 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Does anyone ever lose that spark?
Replies: 41
Views: 9294

Re: Does anyone ever lose that spark?

I want that rock.

Great topic and posts. Thanks.
by NickB
September 21st, 2010, 7:47 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Favorite activity to avoid writing
Replies: 28
Views: 7541

Re: Favorite activity to avoid writing

daydreaming sordid affairs...c'mon, be honest here people! LOL Dear hubby, Kidding. Nick