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by jordynface
March 21st, 2010, 7:55 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Multiple POVs in first person. help please.
Replies: 11
Views: 2374

Multiple POVs in first person. help please.

Oh, look, here comes my daily WRITING CRISIS. Fun. Okay, here's my dilemma. I've just started a new novel (a YA spy novel) and as I go (I'm at the very beginning, only 3k into it), and though I really want to tell this book in first person, I'm thinking it might work better with multiple POVs. (Spec...
by jordynface
February 28th, 2010, 5:54 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First Five Pages (Contemporary YA)
Replies: 9
Views: 2144

Re: First Five Pages (Contemporary YA)

THANK YOU EVERYONE!! Sorry about the dialogue breaks... it didn't format correctly when I posted to the thread. Thanks for struggling through it anyways. Grayson is 16 when the story takes place... I should probably find a place to make that clear. And I'll work on cutting some of the backstory; I'm...
by jordynface
February 27th, 2010, 2:45 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First Five Pages (Contemporary YA)
Replies: 9
Views: 2144

First Five Pages (Contemporary YA)

Alright. I realized a few days ago that my story was starting about 3,000 words into the ms. ACK! My wordcount is down to 55k now (YA though, so it's okay), but I've switched up the beginning and would love to get some feedback on it. I just want to know if it works. If it's interesting. I don't exa...
by jordynface
February 25th, 2010, 4:30 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Rejection Stats
Replies: 227
Views: 97415

Re: Rejection Stats

question: the manuscript box I found is kind of big, since they only asked for 50 pages and i'm afraid it will make me look careless. I know I'm suppose to send it out within the week, but should i try to find a smaller box for partials or just send it in the box I have? If it's 50 pages, they migh...
by jordynface
February 25th, 2010, 1:34 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: the start of my story is 3,000 words in.
Replies: 7
Views: 1259

Re: the start of my story is 3,000 words in.

Thank you all. :)

Follow-up question: if one of the agents who currently has a partial asks for the full, should I send the revised version even though it'll be different from the partial, or would that be frowned upon/unprofessional?
by jordynface
February 25th, 2010, 4:07 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: the start of my story is 3,000 words in.
Replies: 7
Views: 1259

the start of my story is 3,000 words in.

(i'm not sure if this should go here or in the 'finding an agent' forum - apologies if it's in the wrong place.) Three edits and thirty-five (sent) queries after finishing my novel, I think I've finally figured out where the beginning should be. Problem is, the place the story truly begins is two ch...
by jordynface
February 24th, 2010, 8:23 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Rejection Stats
Replies: 227
Views: 97415

Re: Rejection Stats

Alright, NEW! and IMPROVED! rejection stats.... Queries Sent: 35 Rejections: 17 Partial Requests: 3 Full Requests: 1 No Response (Yet): 14 Two of the partial requests & one of the rejections was with my newly-revised query that many of you (and most importantly my sister) helped me get right. Is sev...
by jordynface
February 24th, 2010, 1:58 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Do agents really represent the author or the book?
Replies: 6
Views: 1264

Re: Do agents really represent the author or the book?

I'm guessing the whole agent/love thing has to do with how much time the agent will end up spending with your book, especially if she/he is a hands-on agent who's going to be making editorial suggestions, etc. Also: agents are more like spokespeople for books than salespeople. You can lie to sell so...
by jordynface
February 22nd, 2010, 7:45 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: A couple of questions re: YA & queries
Replies: 4
Views: 1216

Re: A couple of questions re: YA & queries

The name, in case anyone was wondering, is Grayson and someone thought that might be a problem with WILL GRAYSON, WILL GRAYSON coming out soon.
by jordynface
February 22nd, 2010, 5:21 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: PARTIAL REQUEST!!!! help please?
Replies: 5
Views: 1352

Re: PARTIAL REQUEST!!!! help please?

That's what I'm looking at now. Problem is, if I combine them then one chapter will be twice as long as the other two and it might read a bit awkwardly. I'm going to look at it though.
by jordynface
February 22nd, 2010, 5:14 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: PARTIAL REQUEST!!!! help please?
Replies: 5
Views: 1352

PARTIAL REQUEST!!!! help please?

YAAAAYYY!!!! Okay so I just got my second partial request for the novel I'm shopping and have a (possibly stupid) question: the agent wants me to send the first three chapters and I'm wondering how big of a no-no it is to send the first four instead? My novel is YA and the chapters are pretty short;...
by jordynface
February 21st, 2010, 4:22 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Meeting of the Waters - query request
Replies: 21
Views: 3759

Re: Meeting of the Waters - query request

Some quick thoughts off the top of my head. 1. What bearing do the 2016 Olympics have on your story? Am I missing this? 2. Definitely use the same name for Ale all the way through. 3. This looks to me like fantasy with sci-fi elements... I'd choose the genre you think it fits best (even if you're no...
by jordynface
February 21st, 2010, 3:55 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Help: Contemporary YA - Sitting on Rooftops
Replies: 11
Views: 2218

Re: Query Help: Contemporary YA - Sitting on Rooftops

I think perhaps the problem is that some things are not clear in the summary of the story. If the cousins are reuniting at her grandparent's home - does that imply that before the death of her aunt and uncle they all stayed with her grandparents? No. Of course not, but it 's not clear. Why were the...
by jordynface
February 20th, 2010, 11:27 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Help: Contemporary YA - Sitting on Rooftops
Replies: 11
Views: 2218

Re: Query Help: Contemporary YA - Sitting on Rooftops

Thanks to everyone who's given me advice so far. Hope you're not sick of me yet because here's take #whateverthisis and I still need critiques. :) --------------------- Dear Agent, Grayson was thirteen when her aunt and uncle died, leaving an emptiness that shattered the family. Before, Grayson and ...
by jordynface
February 20th, 2010, 10:14 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: A Measure of Disorder (YA Fantasy) REVISED AGAIN = )
Replies: 19
Views: 3142

Re: QUERY: A Measure of Disorder (YA Fantasy) REVISED AGAIN = )

I'm not so good at the line-by-line, but some suggestions/observations: 1. I'd start out with a stronger opening sentence/paragraph. Things get REALLY EXCITING when the class is whisked off to Mother and if you can find a way to open with that (instead of how normal and ordinary the girl is) that wo...