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by hannah_dreamergirl_3
July 6th, 2011, 8:35 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: The Time
Replies: 3
Views: 4365

Re: The Time

thanks for the comments ellis...i havent sent out yet, as i am waiting formy friends to finish readng.
The reaso it seems fague is that there would be a covering letter to cover genre etc, the synopsis has to tell the story and show my writing style.

Thanks,

Hannah
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
June 5th, 2011, 1:15 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: The Time
Replies: 3
Views: 4365

The Time

Hey guys, I'm getting ready to send off to my preferred agent and want to see what you think of my synopsis, I'm abit concerned about flow, but feel I'm almost there! All help appreciated! ‘“Teri, you join that game you end up chasing and chasing until you’re the one who gets chased.”’ Teri’s father...
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 18th, 2011, 1:29 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: THE TIME Synopses (new version further down)
Replies: 3
Views: 1813

Re: THE TIME Synopses (new version further down)

‘“Teri, you join that game you end up chasing and chasing until you’re the one who gets chased.”’ Teri’s father’s favourite expression suddenly has new meaning when she wakes from a drug induced sleep to find herself back in the Secret Departments after having been fired. Carter, the reason she was ...
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 18th, 2011, 1:10 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE TIME revised version
Replies: 8
Views: 1358

Re: THE TIME revised version

Latest version.... thanks sooo much Joel Q, I really feel I'm getting there now! It's so good to know I'm on the right track. The last time Teri Monohans personal life got complicated she was thrown out of the Secret Departments and the elite Cobra Club, made up of just five agents. When Teri was t...
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 18th, 2011, 6:17 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: ok, hopefully the final draft....
Replies: 3
Views: 899

Re: ok, hopefully the final draft....

Thanks for this guys!! I will post the revised version later today!
:-)

You know when you say to cut the bit about Mac, he is a really itegral part of the story...I know I have my synopsis, but I waned to include him. Is their a better way or do you think I really should cut that paragraph?
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 16th, 2011, 1:26 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: THE TIME Synopses (new version further down)
Replies: 3
Views: 1813

Re: THE TIME Synopses

thanks Jen :-) that is really helpful! I will post the revised version here later.

Thanks!!!
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 14th, 2011, 3:29 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: SAW IT COMING (new ending paragraph)
Replies: 27
Views: 4016

Re: Query: SAW IT COMING (new ending paragraph)

This sounds like an AMAZING idea, let me know when it's published in the uk so I can read it!!!!
I also think the query sounds really good, concise, to the point, whilst giving me a real look into the story and the character. I think its pretty set and ready to go.
Good luck!
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 14th, 2011, 3:02 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: Forum Suggestions Box
Replies: 97
Views: 61813

Re: Forum Suggestions Box

oh gosh I know its so annoying, I've reported a couple of times, might go through some more!
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 14th, 2011, 1:33 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: ok, hopefully the final draft....
Replies: 3
Views: 899

ok, hopefully the final draft....

Hi guys, I think I'm there, but you just never know! Here's the latest version of my query for THE TIME.... Dear The last time Teri Monohans personal life got complicated she was thrown out of the Secret Departments. Being a spy is the biggest part of her life but after things got nasty with her now...
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 14th, 2011, 1:30 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - The Cacao Conspiracy - newest version in post 16
Replies: 15
Views: 2674

Re: Query - The Cacao Conspiracy

[quote="Bron"]Hi everyone, I've gone through a few draft of my query and this is the latest version. I've sent it to three agents and have received 2 Rs and a no response (it hasn't been long to be fair). I'm not sure whether the query is bad, or just not to their taste. What do you all think? Any s...
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 14th, 2011, 1:16 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: THE TIME Synopses (new version further down)
Replies: 3
Views: 1813

THE TIME Synopses (new version further down)

Hi guys, You were all amazing in helping me with my query, you know how it is, the first draft is always awful when you look at it again. So here is my synopses, it is the two pager to be sent to literary agents. It is specified with the agents that I'm sending to it should be a brief outline of the...
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 9th, 2011, 1:51 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: FYI You guys are AWESOME!
Replies: 10
Views: 1382

Re: FYI You guys are AWESOME!

great to hear of success, makes me even more confident in the advice everyone gives. You're right they are great!
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 9th, 2011, 1:23 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What to do, what to do?
Replies: 12
Views: 1739

Re: What to do, what to do?

I know what you mean....my worst habit ever is that I don't plan. I just have an idea and run with it and by the end theres a story. The only problem I found was later, trying to write the synopses! I think the advice given here is fantastic. But don't give up on something that is crying out to be w...
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 9th, 2011, 10:57 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE TIME revised version
Replies: 8
Views: 1358

Re: THE TIME revised version

Hi guys thank-you sooo very much for your comments, here is the latest version... Dear The last time Teri Monohans personal life got complicated she was thrown out of the Secret Departments. Being a spy is the biggest part of her life but after things got nasty with her now ex-fiancé, she was forced...
by hannah_dreamergirl_3
March 8th, 2011, 4:41 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE TIME revised version
Replies: 8
Views: 1358

THE TIME revised version

New version further down!!! Hi again, I'm hoping this is better, though I'm uncertain about the genre now, I was sure it was YA asTeri is 25 an her friends in their twenties, but I feel the tone is suited to someone my own age (I'm seventeen) and believe it would appeal to fifteen years to mid twen...