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LATEST QUERY DRAFT _________________ Most girls dream of becoming a princess, but seventeen-year-old Nadine is not like most girls. When King Joseph announces at the annual Embers Ball that she has been chosen to marry his son Kellan, the ruthless and arrogant Prince of Embero, to satisfy his queen...

REVISION ************ Dear Prospective Agent, Jenni Kershaw is an ordinary eighth grader stuck in an ordinary life and she’s extraordinarily tired of it. Her break from the ordinary comes when her science class goes on a field trip. Armed with only notebooks, mp3 players, and their wits, Jenni and ...

Taylor, thank you very much for your thoughts. Regarding the age group, I'm at a loss as to what it really is. Most of the YA that I've seen seems to deal with more mature (sexual/relationship) matters than I have in my story, yet the Middle Grade stories I've seen are, well, younger in ideas than w...

I would agree with much of what aspiring has to say above. My impression was of a lot of unnecessary words. Also, personal pet peeve here: she exists, so she is not "mythical". That's a word that gets overused, and incorrectly in most cases, in my opinion. Second paragraph, my question was...

Revision on page 2 of posts, please have a look at that one. Dear Prospective Agent, Jenni Kershaw is an ordinary eighth grader stuck in an ordinary life and she’s extraordinarily tired of it! Her break from the ordinary comes when her science class goes on a field trip. Armed with sack lunches, mp...