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Posted: August 22nd, 2015, 7:17 pm
Hey folks! So I've been tweaking this query a bit, and I'd very much appreciate a bit more feedback! Thanks in advance!
Dear Agent Amazing
Uriel has always been silent. Born as the village mute in a small Jewish town known for its choir, the ten-year-old boy has always been left out. But although he can’t speak, he can write. In a golden notebook he writes tales of angels and mystical adventures. And after his village is destroyed by a gang of Nazi-supporters, his stories seem to come to life.
When he awakens in the aftermath of the pogrom, Uriel finds that he can see, hear, and communicate with angels. Unfortunately, the angels and the Jewish people are in danger. The Archangel Michael, Guardian of the Jewish People, has been captured and hidden by his longtime foe, Samael, the Angel of Death. If Michael is not found soon, the Jewish people will be helpless in the face of the Holocaust.
Holy angels, however, cannot approach sin-swathed areas without being incapacitated by pain. Because of this, they are forced to send Uriel as their Angel-Finder into the Nazi-infested area. With a necklace crafted by the angels that makes him invisible to the wicked, Uriel sets off to find the Archangel and save his people.
But while Uriel searches for the Archangel, Samael himself appears. Amused by the mute boy, the Angel of Death makes a deal with Uriel. If Uriel completes five tasks for the Angel of Death, he will reveal where Michael is hidden. If not, then Uriel must hand over the necklace that keeps the Nazis from finding him. Now Uriel must struggle through Samael’s tests to save the Jews, all while the Nazis work to rid Poland of his people.
A mixture of historical fiction and Jewish folklore, URIEL is complete at 106,000 words.
Thank you for your time and consideration,
Moi
Dear Agent Amazing
Uriel has always been silent. Born as the village mute in a small Jewish town known for its choir, the ten-year-old boy has always been left out. But although he can’t speak, he can write. In a golden notebook he writes tales of angels and mystical adventures. And after his village is destroyed by a gang of Nazi-supporters, his stories seem to come to life.
When he awakens in the aftermath of the pogrom, Uriel finds that he can see, hear, and communicate with angels. Unfortunately, the angels and the Jewish people are in danger. The Archangel Michael, Guardian of the Jewish People, has been captured and hidden by his longtime foe, Samael, the Angel of Death. If Michael is not found soon, the Jewish people will be helpless in the face of the Holocaust.
Holy angels, however, cannot approach sin-swathed areas without being incapacitated by pain. Because of this, they are forced to send Uriel as their Angel-Finder into the Nazi-infested area. With a necklace crafted by the angels that makes him invisible to the wicked, Uriel sets off to find the Archangel and save his people.
But while Uriel searches for the Archangel, Samael himself appears. Amused by the mute boy, the Angel of Death makes a deal with Uriel. If Uriel completes five tasks for the Angel of Death, he will reveal where Michael is hidden. If not, then Uriel must hand over the necklace that keeps the Nazis from finding him. Now Uriel must struggle through Samael’s tests to save the Jews, all while the Nazis work to rid Poland of his people.
A mixture of historical fiction and Jewish folklore, URIEL is complete at 106,000 words.
Thank you for your time and consideration,
Moi