Share your opening sentence!
- PolarisStarr
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I’m in the backyard sitting cross-legged inside a 2x2x8 wooden box made of plywood filled with earthworms.
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ONCE UPON A TIME beyond a certain dark pine forest in a distant land, beyond thrice nine mountains, beyond thrice seventh tundras into the fifty-seventh kingdom, there was a world with caves, rivers, mountains, creatures and a castle.
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Once upon a time, over the ninth land, beyond thrice kingdom, there existed a planet called Planet Palms.
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Mine would be:
Jonah would never forget the day he died.
Jonah would never forget the day he died.
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Impressive opening - 10.Josin wrote:We're all immortal until we die.
Here's one of mine...
My heart clenched at the sight of the folded white slip of paper barely noticeable in the vent of my locker.
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Okay, I can't choose. They're all pretty good. Here's mine:
"My life did not begin until I had experienced death."
"My life did not begin until I had experienced death."
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I like it. I give a 10!!!!!!!christi wrote:Okay, I can't choose. They're all pretty good. Here's mine:
"My life did not begin until I had experienced death."
Here's mine from my finished ms:
Damn, I wish he would look at me before I leave today, Jaimie fumed silently.
From my current WIP:
"Are you out of your mind Dr. Wade?"
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marilyn peake wrote:maybegenius - I love your sentence! I give it a 9.
NHWriter wrote:This is my favorite so far as well.maybegenius wrote:Sometimes the world is so cold my voice freezes in the air and shatters.Josin wrote:We're all immortal until we die.
Thank you all! *blush*cassandrabonmot wrote:Maybegenius,
Love it. 9 or 10!! I def keep reading. Good job!
Lots of good hooks here! Keep them coming :)
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This is a such a fun topic! Here is mine from my YA novel out on submission right now:
Your dad will leave you when you are twelve.
Your dad will leave you when you are twelve.
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Mine is pretty boring compared to those. :(
The cold wind blew the exhaust of a passing bus into my face and I coughed into my hand.
The cold wind blew the exhaust of a passing bus into my face and I coughed into my hand.
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Until puberty hit life was pretty great, but then I turned twelve and terrible things started to happen.
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A short story I began tonight:
I found the revolver in a plain brown box.
There are some gems above. I enjoy non sequiturs, even if, being opening lines, these don't follow anything.
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I found the revolver in a plain brown box.
There are some gems above. I enjoy non sequiturs, even if, being opening lines, these don't follow anything.
~Serzen
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abc - I really like your opening sentence. Seems like it would be very appealing to a curious MG reader.
Here's mine (contemporary YA):
Ten months ago, I was nobody – no one took me on fancy dates or paid special attention to me, but no one wanted to kill me, either.
Here's mine (contemporary YA):
Ten months ago, I was nobody – no one took me on fancy dates or paid special attention to me, but no one wanted to kill me, either.
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Ooo!! Very intriguing! I like it!
Mine (YA w/ a female MC):
I had a hairy upper lip.
Mine (YA w/ a female MC):
I had a hairy upper lip.
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EvelynEhrlich--thanks!
I'm smitten with many of these juicy sentences!
I had a hairy upper lip? awesome.
I'm smitten with many of these juicy sentences!
I had a hairy upper lip? awesome.
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