dios4vida wrote:So when you have a dialogue with two people, and one's response is non-verbal, does it still need to be set in its own paragraph?
polymath wrote:You're welcome, dios4vida. I'm seeing appreciable strengthening in those brief examples of your understanding of narrative distance, which I believe is one of the final hurdles struggling writers come up against before it all becomes second nature.
polymath wrote:Because it's an emotional situation, I believe it calls for a second emotional context so the meaning of the chuckle is clear enough for readers. Is the chuckle one of amusement? Embarrassment? Stress? And so on. How does Raeb perceive Saybee's chuckle? The meaning to him of it, I mean.
dios4vida wrote: I see what you mean, here. How she chuckles, and how he interprets it, are huge clues as to the tone of the conversation and the relationship between them. A warm chuckle shared by friends is very different from an ironic chuckle interpreted as warm, or vice versa. Such a perfect place to show (not tell!) the depths of their relationship (or in this case, the lack thereof) and I nearly missed out on it. Yet another jewel of knowledge that I owe to you, polymath.
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