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- November 20th, 2014, 2:48 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Defender: Return of the Harkers
- Replies: 2
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Re: Defender: Return of the Harkers
Trying something with a little more voice here on this go-round. I am seeking literary representation and hope you will consider for my fantasy novel, DEFENDER: RETURN OF THE HARKERS. Before school even starts, Caden is caught with a knife he's not allowed to have. Not because it's a weapon. The ac...
- November 19th, 2014, 1:59 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Shades of Darkness Revised at post #4
- Replies: 4
- Views: 4123
Re: Query: Shades of Darkness
Carla Dubrov has spent most of her life imprisoned or on the run. Why? What did she do? Start with that. she learns, through a vision, that Jason D’Cartey will give his life to save hers Who is Jason? Is she psychic? What does giving life to save hers mean? Under what circumstances? What danger is ...
- November 19th, 2014, 1:58 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Shades of Darkness Revised at post #4
- Replies: 4
- Views: 4123
Revised #3
Dear … There is no such thing as true immortality. Eternity is a long time to make enemies, and Carla Dubrov knows that sooner or later, everyone gets killed. To survive, Carla has taken the lives of many immortals, but the one that will forever haunt her was not taken—it was given. Anthony, the man...
- October 29th, 2014, 12:33 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Shades of Darkness Revised at post #4
- Replies: 4
- Views: 4123
Re: Query: Shades of Darkness
This is a second draft I've been working on. Which one sounds better? Dear … Carla Dubrov has spent most of her life imprisoned or on the run. But when she learns, through a vision, that Jason D’Cartey will give his life to save hers, she must venture out of hiding. She has never met Jason, but she ...
- October 27th, 2014, 2:44 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Shades of Darkness Revised at post #4
- Replies: 4
- Views: 4123
Query: Shades of Darkness Revised at post #4
Hey guys! This is my query. Any suggestions you might have to improve it will be well received. Thank you in advance. Dear ..., Carla Dubrov knew that a young man named Jason D’Cartey would one day give his life to protect hers. She knew because she had seen it in a vision–and that, not death, was C...
- October 26th, 2014, 6:04 am
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 720
- Views: 451945
Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Title: SHADES OF DARKNESS Genre: fantasy Words: 273 His eyes turned to me the second I entered the room; those sharp black eyes I only knew from my vision—the stranger’s eyes. No. He is not a stranger, I told myself with a shudder. He is Richard D’Cartey’s son. And his life depends on me. My mouth w...
- October 26th, 2014, 5:25 am
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 213
- Views: 183607
Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Dear Mr. Bransford, There is no such thing as true immortality. Eternity is a long time to make enemies, and Carla Dubrov knows that sooner or later, everyone gets killed. To survive, Carla has taken the lives of many immortals, but the one that will forever haunt her was not taken—it was given. Ant...