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- March 28th, 2012, 5:27 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First 500 Words of a Sci Fi Short
- Replies: 8
- Views: 8383
Re: First 500 Words of a Sci Fi Short
Hi Steve, I think this looks great. You get a strong sense of the character and the setting. Since I have no structural comments, I'll just note that I think you're looking for "there" rather than "their" in the first sentence of the last full paragraph. And you might consider ma...
- March 28th, 2012, 4:58 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction
- Replies: 6
- Views: 5082
Re: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction
Thanks Trw! I'll send you a note as well. It's relatively short, after this last round of revisions, it should come in around 55K.
- March 24th, 2012, 5:38 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction
- Replies: 6
- Views: 5082
Re: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction
Thanks! I sent you a message to arrange a swap. - SI
- March 22nd, 2012, 5:46 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Any Better? Query: Bleamy's Corner
- Replies: 3
- Views: 3082
Re: Any Better? Query: Bleamy's Corner
I agree, I think the story sounds compelling, and for this query I would work on beginning with and maintaining a more active voice: When the crops fail on the Bleamy family farm during the drought of 1802, eleven-year-old Jeremy Bleamy and his parents are forced to leave their belongings, their dog...
- March 22nd, 2012, 1:35 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction
- Replies: 6
- Views: 5082
Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction
Well this seems to be the saddest category on the forum in terms of responses, but I'll give it a shot just in case. I'm in the final stages of preparing my manuscript before sending it out to agents and would love to have some objective feedback from someone interested in multiple perspective liter...