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- June 16th, 2010, 12:19 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query - Sept. 23rd
- Replies: 21
- Views: 8252
Re: The Gravity of San Miguel - Query
Wow! Talk about a dramatic improvement! This is much more clear, and compelling. I do (of course!) have a few suggestions. First, in the first line I think you either need three examples, or a 'and' bridge and then a period before going to the child. That would have better flow. Also, the transition...
- June 15th, 2010, 12:28 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: "Boy books"
- Replies: 17
- Views: 6866
Re: "Boy books"
Interesting discussion, especially the bits about the screening of books possibly watering down the material, so boys may be less likely to voluntarily read. Or that's how I'd summarize it, anyway. Someone mentioned boys not choosing books with a female protagonist, and while I agree that it's not a...
- June 14th, 2010, 9:33 pm
- Forum: Town Hall
- Topic: The Introduction Thread
- Replies: 647
- Views: 413134
Re: The Introduction Thread
Hello to all my fellow noobs and veterans of the board. I'm a writer--astonishing, I know--and happy to have gotten over my lurking habit to post in the forums. It was the contests that finally drew me out. Huzzah for contests! I've lived all over the US and would like to extend that to the world. I...
- June 14th, 2010, 8:40 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 213
- Views: 186201
Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Dear Mr. Bransford, I am seeking representation for my mid-grade urban fantasy novel, 13 DEMON DAYS, which is complete at 55,000 words. 13 Demon Days blends the dark and powerful family inheritance of the Artemis Fowl books with the whimsy and magical wonder of Fablehaven. Josh and Liz Raven are 13-...
- June 11th, 2010, 9:00 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 720
- Views: 458191
Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Title: 13 Demon Days Genre: MG Urban Fantasy Words: 244 Josh stood beside Liz on the front porch and watched the cars pull away, but he didn’t wave goodbye. Liz could smile and flutter her hands if she wanted to, just as if their birthday hadn’t been another disaster and the guests a bunch of bully ...