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- October 6th, 2010, 4:03 pm
- Forum: Self-Publishing
- Topic: Humane training book
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Humane training book
Hey Nathan, I saw on Alan Rinzler's blog... http://www.alanrinzler.com/blog/2010/09/25/literary-agents-open-the-door-to-self-published-writers/... that you've sold a previously published book on humane dog training. Just wanted to say, "Good on ya!" There are a ton of resources on Dogwise ...
- September 10th, 2010, 9:28 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10
- Replies: 33
- Views: 41556
Re: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10
The first line isn't passive. "Were standing" is past progressive tense. It means the action is in progress, and it's a perfectly legitimate tense to use.Passive voice is an issue here (particularly with the first line).
- September 10th, 2010, 1:57 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10
- Replies: 33
- Views: 41556
Re: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10
Thanks for offering your page up for critique! This is one of those pages where I'd like to see what follows, because I want to see if there's a reason for the distance in the writing. We are being told what's happening by some distant, omnicient narrator. It's hard to connect, hard to feel any surp...
- June 9th, 2010, 2:25 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 720
- Views: 458190
Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Title: DOUBTING RIVER Genre: Mainstream Word count: 240 Thwap, thwap, thwap, thwap. Lucas’s footsteps pounded a staccato rhythm along the trail: you’re late, you’re late. “I’m going as fast as I can,” he muttered, but he pushed his legs faster, hurdling fallen branches and zigzagging through close-p...